Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is true that, living in an another country where you have to speak a foreign language instead of native can harmful for both social problems and practical problems. I completely agree with this idea.

However, i believe this is very serious problem for every citizen those who live other country. For example, people who comes from another country interact with native individual for simple talk or for a shoping in a market interaction with people face the difficulties because in the beginning they do not know the accent.

Moreover, the immigrants also faced the problems in practical life for example, when those foreigners want to get a job the policymakers prefer the native citizens or which have a green card of that country. The main reason for that the language barrier.

In conclusion, the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I completely agree”—and give relevant examples about everyday interactions and finding work. These points show an understanding of both social and practical difficulties. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the examples are brief, and the explanation of how language barriers create serious problems is not developed. The employment point also shifts to employers preferring citizens or green-card holders, without clearly explaining how speaking a foreign language causes that preference. The conclusion is unfinished (“In conclusion, the”), so the argument is not brought to a clear close. The response is 126 words, below the 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop each reason with explanation or a specific example, and complete the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs introduced by “However” and “Moreover,” and an attempted conclusion. The examples are grouped by topic, with social interaction discussed before employment, so the reader can follow the general direction. However, progression is limited, and the link between the employment example and the language barrier is asserted rather than clearly explained. “However” also suggests a contrast that is not established, since the next paragraph continues your agreement. The final paragraph stops mid-sentence, leaving the essay without closure. Use linking expressions that accurately show the relationship between ideas, connect each example to its main point, and finish with a concise summary of your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “interact,” “accent,” “immigrants,” “practical life,” and “language barrier.” These terms help communicate the main concerns, and the reader can generally identify your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “harmful for both social problems and practical problems” and “simple talk.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “shoping” and “individual” where a plural is needed. Aim for more precise topic language and natural combinations, such as “social and practical difficulties,” “everyday conversations,” and “local residents.” Check spelling and word forms carefully, and avoid repeating “problems” when a more specific term would clarify the point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, the sentence beginning “For example, people who comes from another country…” This shows an effort to explain ideas through subordinate clauses. However, the range remains limited, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms are frequent enough to make parts difficult to read. Examples include “living in an another country,” “people who comes,” and “the immigrants also faced,” where the article, agreement, or tense is not controlled. The opening sentence also has an unclear construction around “instead of native.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea and a supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement, articles, and consistent tense. Capitalise “I” and use full stops to separate complete thoughts.

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