Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Moving to a country where foreign language is spoken can be challanging. I completely agree with this statement because it create serious social and practical problems, language is the key to communicate in everyday life.

Firstly, not speaking their foreign language can seriously create social problems. When a perosn cannot communicate by their local language of that country, it leads to avoidance of social events, person cannot make freinds easily, not endulge in events. For example, many pakistani citizens move to abroad where they cannot communicate and stay in touch with their own community. As a result, they feel lonely and exclude from society.

Secondly. there are many practical problems that people face. They struggle in finding the jobs, in education, in hospital because they cannot communicate with others. For example, a perosn donot speak their language, when they go to hospital they cannot explain their symptoms to doctors, so they face difficulty. Therefore, many immigrants do low paid jobs which affect their financial situation.

Whereas, many individuals argued that there are social apps that helps people in language, finding routes, it has some merit, that technology made our lives much easier but we do not take a fully advantage from these apps. We should learn foriegn language to make our life easier.

In conclusion, I believe that living in a foreign country create many problems related to social and practical problems.Although, people can language over time but the initial period can be quite difficult. The government should provide free language courses to immigrants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you completely agree that living where a foreign language is spoken can create social and practical problems. You address both areas with relevant examples, including isolation from the wider community and difficulty explaining symptoms to a doctor, and your conclusion adds a practical response through free language courses. This covers the task, but some points are more fully addressed than others. The social example about Pakistani citizens is broad and would be stronger with a specific situation or explanation of how limited communication leads to exclusion. The point about technology is also introduced briefly without showing how much it reduces the problems. Develop these ideas with clearer reasoning and support to make your response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs on social and practical difficulties, a counterpoint, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. However, progression is sometimes weakened by mechanical or unclear connections. “Whereas” introduces the technology point without clearly identifying what it contrasts with, and “it has some merit” has an unclear reference. The social paragraph also strings several effects together rather than showing their relationship smoothly. Use linking phrases that express the precise relationship between ideas, and make pronouns refer clearly to a specific noun. A more developed transition into the counterargument would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “social problems,” “immigrants,” “financial situation,” and “language courses.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “stay in touch with their own community.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts less natural or occasionally harder to understand. Examples include “not endulge in events,” “exclude from society,” and “do not take a fully advantage.” Spelling errors such as “challanging,” “perosn,” and “foriegn” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for social integration and access to services, and check spelling and word forms carefully during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “when they go to hospital they cannot explain their symptoms” and a contrast in the final paragraph. The main message is generally understandable, but errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries occur across the response. For example, “it create” should be “it creates,” and “social apps that helps” should be “social apps that help.” The opening sentence joins two independent ideas with a comma, while “Secondly.” incorrectly separates the transition from the sentence that follows. Some clauses are also incomplete or awkwardly formed, as in “Although, people can language over time.” Practise accurate clause construction and proofread for subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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