Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In recent year, many people living in a rural area where they have to speak a foreign language can give cause to serious social problems, even though practical issues. While there are enormous dilemma in our all countries on this days because many people use internet and related to other mobile features.

On the one hand, there are several social platforms in our country because many young youths all time watching the phone and utilities internet. For example, students can use smartphone for education purposes rather than, they had a lots of time spend tiktok, Facebook, Instagram and Snapchat for entertainment. Regarding this issues many health and face other physical p

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5

The response makes a limited attempt to address the topic, but it does not establish whether you agree or disagree with the statement about the social and practical problems of living in a foreign-language country. The opening shifts to rural living, internet use and mobile features, which are not clearly connected to the task. The example about students using social media also concerns phone habits rather than language barriers, and the final point is cut off. The response therefore offers little relevant support for a position. It also does not meet the required minimum length, leaving too little space to explain both types of problems or develop relevant examples. State your view directly, then explain and illustrate it with points about communication, services, work or social integration.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening is followed by a paragraph beginning “On the one hand,” and an example is introduced with “For example.” These signals show an awareness of paragraphing and linking. However, the ideas do not progress clearly from the question, and the relationship between the opening’s internet point and the paragraph about students is difficult to follow. “On the one hand” also suggests that a contrasting point will follow, but no second side or conclusion appears. Some references, such as “this issues,” are unclear, and the final sentence stops abruptly. To improve, use a simple structure—introduction with a clear position, one paragraph on social problems, one on practical problems, and a conclusion—and connect each example explicitly to the main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “social problems,” “practical issues,” “education purposes” and “entertainment,” and you name familiar platforms to make the example concrete. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which makes the intended meaning hard to follow: “give cause to serious social problems,” “enormous dilemma in our all countries,” and “utilities internet” do not express the ideas clearly. The vocabulary also moves away from the task’s central topic of foreign-language communication. Build a more relevant set of phrases, such as “language barrier,” “difficulty accessing public services,” and “social isolation,” and check collocations and word forms. More precise wording would help you explain your examples without relying on vague phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both longer sentence forms and simpler statements, for example the opening sentence and “For example, students can use smartphone for education purposes.” However, control is uneven: “In recent year” lacks appropriate number marking, “many people living … can give cause” has an unclear verb construction, and “there are enormous dilemma” has an agreement error. The clause beginning “While there are…” is not completed as a clear independent sentence, and the final sentence is unfinished. These problems make several relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, singular/plural agreement and clause boundaries. A few accurate complex sentences are more effective than longer sentences whose structure is unclear.

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