Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

From the last few decades it has been observed that significant numbers of people commute to several other nation in the purpose of study and jobs. It has been often argues that survive in the foreign country and speaking the local language cause serious social and practical problems. On a large extent I agree with the given statement, my opinion is two forth in the upcoming paragraphs.

The first and foremost reason what cause the social conflict, while living in foreign country without any idea of local speech is that it creates a language barrier. The citizen of that place communicate with each other into their mother tongue or local language, but the migrated people do not able to cope up that language easily and feel left out, overwhelmed and frightened. Moreover, they are not familiar with the particular country cultural and religious norms, due to which sometimes they commented adverse comment cause they have to faced several consequences such as penalty, penitentiaries and coropol punishments.

Furthermore, if the large numbers of people migrate to the particular nation increase competition, unemployment and inflation. To justify, migrators required jobs to survive, from which the competition inclined and for 1 vacancy hundreds of applicants applies. Apart from that, they also need shelter to stay, so new house are formed by prune of forests which increase global warming and the price of accommodations. For instance, in Canada few years back the house price in Toronto was [redacted phone] dollars, which skyrocket and reach at 1.5 million dollars.

On the other hand, it is also irrefutable that while having people from diverse country enhance the knowledge of multiple religion, culture and rituals and make world global family. Secondly, it also escalate the sense of intermingle. Which means people from various tribes stays together and work along, due to which it bolster country to developed.

In a nutshell, I reaffirm my opinion that living in a country where individual speak foreign language cause certain social and practical problem such as unemployment, feel left out and increase prices and inflation. Therefore, there should be more viable source required.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both social and practical problems, though the development is uneven. You clearly state your position in the introduction, which is a strength. However, the argument regarding migration causing inflation and environmental damage is somewhat tangential to the core issue of language barriers. While you attempt to provide examples, such as the housing prices in Toronto, the link between language barriers and these economic outcomes is not explicitly explained, making the argument feel slightly disconnected. To improve, ensure that every point directly relates back to the challenges of living in a foreign language environment.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'In a nutshell' to guide the reader. However, the transition between ideas is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is disrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'my opinion is two forth in the upcoming paragraphs'. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, which occasionally forces the reader to re-read sentences to grasp the intended meaning. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words will help achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting to use more sophisticated terms like 'irrefutable', 'bolster', and 'skyrocket'. However, there are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'commute to several other nation' (nations), 'penitentiaries and coropol punishments' (corporal), and 'prune of forests' (clearing). These errors occasionally impede the precision of your argument. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations for the words you use and ensure you are using vocabulary in the appropriate context to avoid confusion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, they are frequently marred by grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('migrators required jobs', 'house price... was... skyrocket') and incorrect verb forms ('do not able to cope up'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are errors in sentence construction that make some parts of the text difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on consistent control over basic grammar, particularly verb tenses and pluralization, and ensure that your complex sentences are constructed accurately.

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