Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Speaking a language which is not your native language does cause lts of problem in understanding and comunnicating. This problem will be more serious if you are not good at or still in learning phase for your second language. AS an EAL student and a student who is focusing on studying IB in an international school, speaking a foreign language sometimes may make people underestimate me.

Imagine you are a middle school student and would like to go abroad like the US or UK, you have to speak fluent English and have nice GPA or whaterver. Unfortunately, your vocablary only stays at 4000, and the grammar has lots of problems on you. You don't know the idioms and other useful experssion in the English. under this stiuation, you will be so passive in learning and communicating with your classmates. When you want to discuss with your professor about your Essay, the way you express about you essay may not as good as you imagine. The professor may understimate you and think you are not the student who should study here. In the grocery, you would like to pay for a carrot, but the you don't know how to ask for the tip. When you drive, the policeman stops you and ask you for the license, you have to go to the police office and to explain it clearly. That is all social or academic problems that we will face if we can't speak fluent English. This is also fit in othe rcountry which doesn't speak language but is also your second language.

In the past, there are lots of people that they cannot choose to stay in their original country, so they have to move to the foreign. The language problem was cause lots of conflict which is unnecessary. However, in the modern, we don't have to be an illegal immigrant, therefore, spaek as fluent as you can for your second language when you would like to go abroad.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

该回答通过讨论在外语环境中生活所面临的社会和实际问题，回应了题目要求。立场始终清晰。然而，观点的展开有些不均衡。虽然关于国际学校学生的个人例子是相关的，但对 'grocery' 和 'policeman' 情景的解释略显简单，缺乏深度。为了达到更高的分数，你应该旨在扩展这些问题的含义，而不仅仅是列举它们。结论有些突兀，没有完全综合正文段落中提出的论点。

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

文章按逻辑分段，从引言到结论思路清晰。你使用了一些衔接手段，如 'However' 和 'Therefore' 来连接观点。然而，一些过渡显得机械或略显生硬，例如 'This is also fit in othe rcountry'。此外，指代有时不明确，通过使用更多样化的连接词来更流畅地衔接论点，句子间的衔接可以得到改善。文章已分段，但可以更有效地利用分段来区分不同的要点。

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

词汇量对于该任务来说基本足够，但相当有限且重复。存在一些拼写错误，如 'lts'、'comunnicating'、'vocablary'、'experssion' 和 'stiuation'，这偶尔会分散读者的注意力。你依赖基础词汇，且难以使用更精确或学术性的搭配。例如，'the way you express about you essay' 是不自然的。若要提升，你应该专注于学习与语言习得和社会融入相关的主题词汇，并更加注意拼写和构词。

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

文章包含了简单句和复杂句的混合，但全文频繁出现语法错误。常见问题包括主谓一致（'The language problem was cause'）、冠词用法（'in the grocery'）以及生硬的措辞（'the grammar has lots of problems on you'）。虽然这些错误并没有完全阻碍交流，但它们频繁到足以引起注意。你应该致力于校对你的作品，以发现时态和句子结构方面的基本错误。增加对复杂结构的掌控将有助于你获得更高的分数。

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