Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Who individuals are living in foreign countries. Although they can face numerous social and practical problems, if they do not know how to communicate with foreigners they cannot get job. I strongly agree with this statement. people do not know about their language, they cannot interact with each other.
On the one hand, language is most vital part of life, because language helps to communication with people. Although who people are living in abroad, unfortunately some individuals do not learn languages such as English language speak in worldwide. resultant they suffer from problems. For example, in Germany many international students are facing problems, because they do not able to speak in German. Consequently, they cannot get part time jobs, because for working in companies, hotels and stores. They require at least B2 German language level to communicate with customers. For that reason, international students cannot get well paying jobs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 149 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the essay is far too brief to fully address the prompt. While you state your position clearly, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth and breadth required for an Academic Task 2 essay. To improve, you must expand on your points with more detailed explanations and additional examples, ensuring you cover all aspects of the prompt, including both social and practical problems, in greater detail.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into two paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is limited due to the brevity of the text. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'Consequently', and 'For that reason', which help link ideas. However, the overall structure is weak because the introduction is disjointed and the essay lacks a clear conclusion. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the opening sentence, which makes the flow of the argument difficult to follow. Improving paragraph structure and ensuring a logical flow from introduction to conclusion is essential.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. You rely on simple phrasing, such as 'living in foreign countries' and 'facing problems'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'language is most vital part of life' (missing articles) and 'speak in worldwide' (incorrect preposition and usage). To achieve a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more precise collocations related to the topic of language and social integration.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'Who individuals are living' (incorrect structure), 'if they do not know how to communicate... they cannot get job' (missing article), and 'they do not able to speak' (incorrect verb form). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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