Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Recently, people argue that residing in a nation where you have to speak a foreign language is raising issues around the globe. Many people aruge that having to speak a diiferent language in place where you live can cause many social issues and challenges, while other asserted that it is for the preservation of owns cultural . I totally agree, speaking foreign language will not raise any social problems or practical problems.
Firstly,having to speak foreign language is big chance to learn new cultural and history. When we live in nation of different ethical community we need to learn to speak different language according to place. So, to adapt in new environment language is very crucial and when oneself tries to learn language of another community they will discover more about the cultural and history inadvertently. Consequently, having to speak provides oppurtunity to learn and explore more about the culture and history of other communities. For example, when I shifted to Kathmandhu from my Sherpa rural village , I learned Nepali language and even Newari language here in Kathmandhu. After learning their language I became more familiar with their culture and people , they treated me as their own people and supported me alot in my journey. This proves that having to speak foreign language does not cause social poblems but rather increase peace among various cultures.
Secondly, having to speak foreign language brings unity in diversity rather than practical problems. At the initial days one might feel uncomfortble but after some period they will be familiar with everything of the foreign place. When another cultural individuals speak the languages of different culture then it reflects the repect and ethnicity's. This makes the citizens living there more near and dear to eachother. Hence, speakign foreign language involves diverse people aound the world to live in peace rather than practical problems.
In conclusion, to speak different foreign language might be challenging for anyone but sooner or later it unites different cultural, ethics people together. It works as the mechanism for unity in diversity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt, but the position is contradictory. In the introduction, you state you 'totally agree' that speaking a foreign language will not raise problems, which contradicts the prompt's premise that it does. This makes your stance confusing. While you provide relevant ideas about cultural exchange and unity, the development is somewhat repetitive. To improve, ensure your position is clearly defined and consistently maintained throughout the essay. You should also focus on addressing the 'social' and 'practical' problems mentioned in the prompt more directly, rather than simply dismissing them as non-existent.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of your argument. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' to signal the structure. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the transition between your personal anecdote and the broader argument could be smoother. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly relates to your overall thesis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'aruge', 'diiferent', 'oppurtunity', 'poblems', 'uncomfortble') and some awkward phrasing. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with precise collocations. For instance, 'big chance' and 'near and dear' are slightly informal or imprecise for an academic essay. To improve, focus on learning more sophisticated synonyms and pay closer attention to spelling. Expanding your range of academic vocabulary will help you express your ideas with more precision and nuance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in nation of'), incorrect verb forms, and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'other asserted', 'speakign foreign language involves'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and subject-verb agreement.
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