Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Peoples living in a country they have a chance to speak in foreign language it can leads to create any social as well as practical problems with others.

The country provide the equal rights to everyone. we use any language to communicate with other citizens. To talk with foreign people the language is very difficult but we can understand their concern. while working in IT companies most of the clients are approaching from various countries. To explain the project details

and reports to customers in suitable language.

Residents are migrate from various places they were required the languages to make conversation with their friends. The students study in multiple international schools language is managed with few word.

The interviews are conduct for jobs in other countries, language is difficult it can create to problem to attend their interviews. In that company all the community conversation in foreign language but i cant understand it creates a social problem.

the practical problem is we cannot write the word without mistakes.

while i am applying for leave letter language grammar is problem the officers are not understand my concerns.

By contrast, Foreign language communicate in few places because it ca

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address the prompt regarding social and practical problems, the arguments are underdeveloped and often lack clarity. The position is not clearly stated or maintained throughout the text. The essay ends abruptly, leaving the final point unfinished. To improve, you must expand on your ideas with specific examples and ensure you reach the required length to allow for a full exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. Paragraphing is inconsistent and does not effectively separate distinct ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs, making the text feel like a series of disjointed statements rather than a cohesive argument. For example, the transition between the discussion of IT companies and the mention of students is abrupt. To improve, focus on using transition words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however') to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear central theme.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Peoples living' instead of 'People living' and 'the language is very difficult' when referring to communication barriers. The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas clearly. To improve, try to learn collocations related to language and social integration, and focus on using more precise terminology to describe the challenges faced by non-native speakers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The country provide'), incorrect verb tenses, and sentence fragments. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are usually inaccurate, leading to confusion. For instance, 'The interviews are conduct for jobs' should be 'Interviews are conducted for jobs'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and correct verb forms before attempting more complex grammatical constructions.

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