Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is argued that to speak abroad language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.
First of all, I would like to disagree this statement because speaking foreign language can help us to know about different languages where we can use them in different countries if we went to another countries for trip, family tour. At this point we it is neccesary to speak foreign language to get our needs and to porchose our food or neccesity.
Secondly, It may cause some eldery citizens problems because they don't know foreign language so it may be difficoHt for them to communica te with others in foreign languages. But young peoples can get knowledge and get ideas from foreigners if they knew how to speak foreign language to communicate with foreigners.
Moreover, people's should knowledge about different countries, languages, cultures in nowadays generations.
I think this will help us to improve our country social work and teach us friendly behaviour.
Overall, In my opinion, I don't think living in a country where we have to speak a foreign language can cause any social problems as well as practical problems.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 190 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, which remain superficial and under-developed. While you state a position, the arguments provided—such as the benefit of learning languages for travel or the difficulties faced by the elderly—are not sufficiently extended or supported with relevant examples. The response lacks the depth required for an Academic Task 2 essay, as it reads more like a brief personal opinion piece rather than a structured argument. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific evidence and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, which helps with the overall structure. However, the progression of ideas is limited due to the brevity of the text. You use basic cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'Moreover', but these are used in a somewhat mechanical way. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between the elderly and the young is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next with clear topic sentences and supporting details.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several spelling errors, such as 'abroad' instead of 'foreign', 'neccesary', 'porchose', 'neccesity', 'eldery', and 'difficoHt'. These errors, combined with the misuse of words like 'porchose' (purchase) and 'knowledge' (as a verb), occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise and academic terms and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('people's should knowledge'), article usage, and sentence fragments. For example, 'I would like to disagree this statement' should be 'disagree with this statement'. The lack of complex sentence structures limits your ability to demonstrate grammatical control. To improve, practice using a mix of complex and compound sentences and focus on correcting basic errors in verb tense and preposition usage to ensure your writing is more accurate and fluent.
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