Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Abroad life is such a tough for other nation's people like they have to learn their country language where they are moving to get better opportunities. Most of the people face social and practical problems when they cannot talk foreign language they couldn't express their feelings or they are having problems while communicating...

At first learning a foreign language is very crucial do you can communicate well if you cannot understand their language this will be problem all the time. You will face obstacle in every way of your life in another nation. Their will be less opportunities for you as you don't know how to talk to them if you get proficiency in their language their will be many doors open for you which will be very helpfull for your advancement.

Besides this most of the country's native language is english so you can have this advantage if you are confident in english. Furthermore it is very best that the country have their native language so you understand it very well

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 172 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay touches upon the prompt by mentioning social and practical problems, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack specific examples or depth. The position is somewhat clear, but the lack of length prevents a full exploration of the topic. To improve, you must expand on your points with detailed explanations and concrete examples to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. Paragraphing is present but the flow of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition') to connect your ideas more effectively and improve the overall flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'Abroad life is such a tough' and 'cannot talk foreign language'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient for a higher band score. You should focus on learning collocations and more precise academic vocabulary. For example, instead of 'talk foreign language', use 'achieve proficiency in a foreign language'. Expanding your range of synonyms and using them in the correct context will significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'Their will be less opportunities' instead of 'There will be fewer opportunities'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence forms, which are necessary for higher band scores. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, punctuation, and the correct use of homophones like 'their/there' and 'they're/their' to improve your accuracy.

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