Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Language is a major problem when someone has to move abroad. In foreign land where people have to talk in foreign language which makes serious issues, or partial problems. I strongly agree with the statement, reasons and examples are mentioned in upcoming paragraph.
To begin with, if people have to move in other country for purpose of working or other reasons, they have to learn that country's language to understand and communication. However, most countries prefer English language for communicate to foreign people for instance, USA, England, Canada, etc. Furthermore, there are some countries who does not prefer English language for communicate with foreigners because they don't talk English in daily routine. For instance, European counties like Germany, Finland, Netherland, France, etc. also some Asian countries like Japan, North Korea, south Korea, etc.
Furthermore, there are some practical problems occurs when people immigrate to other country such as, when people travel to foreign land for work visa initially they suffer from communication problem with staff because they can not understand their talks. In addition, they suffer more in restaurant, clubs, shopping malls. For example, when a person travel to European county for work visa he has to learn at least B1 German language for communication and read the instruction on boards like railway station, bus station boards. Moreover, he has to be fluent because Germans are very serious about fluent
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position clearly in the introduction, the arguments remain underdeveloped. You mention practical problems like communication at work or in public spaces, but the explanation lacks depth and specific, well-supported examples. The essay ends abruptly without a conclusion, meaning the task is not fully addressed. To improve, you must expand on your points with more detailed explanations and ensure you provide a clear summary or concluding thought to round off your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Furthermore', but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. There are issues with referencing; for example, the transition between the general mention of language problems and the specific examples of countries is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases such as 'foreign language', 'foreign land', and 'communication problem'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'partial problems' (which is unclear) and 'countries who does not prefer' (should be 'which do not'). You rely on simple, functional language that lacks the precision required for a higher score. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('countries who does not prefer'), article usage ('in other country'), and sentence structure ('when a person travel to European county... he has to be fluent because Germans are very serious about fluent'). You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, and practice constructing complex sentences with accurate punctuation.
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