Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Living in a country where you have to spoke
foreign language can cause serious social problem as well as practical issue .
Yes , I agree to social problem in foreign language in special issue . The first problem
to market a visit in anything to buy in the
market. And second problem to other office to
submit the document . The other people to teach
the language to teach the in country . we are easy to easily visit the shop market and restaurant and any other places to visit . For example my friend to visit the country in Saudia Arabia country in big issue to speak . My meet to friend in the big issue to speak language .
The foreign language to people in the very difficult language . Other people to speak in own language to speak in but in other country to speak in on this country to speak language . but only first solution to world issue to handle in only one to speak English language to communication . For example The other country to speak in English .
The world to registered in only one language to speak in English . The first language to compulsory in airport on the speak in English language .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the prompt effectively. While you acknowledge the topic, the ideas are underdeveloped and often unclear. You mention practical issues like shopping or submitting documents, but these are not explained in a way that demonstrates a clear argument. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which limits your ability to fully develop your position. To improve, ensure you provide clear, logical reasons for your opinion and support them with specific examples. The focus shifts away from the prompt in the second half, where you discuss English as a global language rather than the social and practical challenges of living in a foreign-speaking country.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. Paragraphs are not clearly defined, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices (such as 'however', 'consequently', or 'furthermore') to link sentences and ideas together. The writing feels like a series of disconnected statements rather than a cohesive argument. To improve, use transition words to connect your thoughts and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed point. The current lack of logical flow makes it difficult for the reader to follow your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Your vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to convey complex ideas. You frequently misuse basic words, such as 'market a visit' or 'my meet to friend'. There is no attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary. To improve, focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and expanding your range of nouns and verbs. Avoid repeating the same words in close proximity. You should also work on using more precise language to describe the social and practical problems mentioned in the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with verb tense (e.g., 'have to spoke'), sentence structure, and word order. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject-verb agreement. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb-object order and correct verb forms. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles ('the', 'a') and incorrect prepositions will also help improve your score.
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