Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

actualy living in foreign country and speak foreign language is challengin because you are foreign individual so you face a issue with speaking their language some word has the same pronunciation ansd has different meaning some of it it's bad word

and if you want be watchful you can messy and insult to the people and this can make your reputintion in the ground and can lead you to fight with indivuduals espically who quick nervous and get you wrong so before speaking you should select the world carfuly for prevent any issue in my experience of reading book i read a book he said for prevent any serious problem with foreign we should to learn their language and practice it every day and that's not sufficient and adequate to avoiding an problem we should learn how respect their religent and their place of pray and their traditional food and culture and overreact about simple attitude and the gouverment and the authority's do awarness their people to get the foreign because he do effort to speak foreign launguage and understand and respect the sit of pray and religion and their culture traditional and he expected the same thing from the other

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student addresses the prompt by discussing both social and practical problems associated with living in a foreign country, such as misunderstandings, offensive words, and the importance of respecting local culture and religion. However, the response falls significantly short of the 250-word minimum, containing only 201 words. This under-length impacts the full development of ideas, restricting the score according to IELTS criteria. The position is somewhat discernible, but ideas are compressed and lack the necessary depth and extension. Therefore, the task achievement is limited by the failure to meet the minimum word count requirement and under-developed supporting examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is written as a single, continuous block of text without any paragraph breaks. This severely disrupts the logical progression and organization of ideas. There is a complete lack of paragraphing, which makes the essay difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying heavily on run-on sentences connected by conjunctions like 'and' rather than structured transitions. While there is a loose train of thought moving from language problems to cultural respect and government awareness, the absence of cohesive structure and paragraphing limits the coherence to a lower band level.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word choice errors. Examples include 'actualy' instead of actually, 'challengin' instead of challenging, 'reputintion in the ground' instead of ruining your reputation, 'carfuly' instead of carefully, 'religent' instead of religion, and 'pray' instead of prayer. The student attempts to use some less common words, but frequent inaccuracies in word formation and collocation impede understanding in several places. The lexical range is narrow and insufficient for precise expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response exhibits very limited grammatical control. The entire text is essentially one massive run-on sentence containing numerous clauses linked incorrectly with coordinating conjunctions and lacking proper punctuation and capitalization. There is an absence of complex structures deployed accurately, and simple sentence forms are compromised by frequent errors such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the gouverment and the authority's do awarness') and missing articles. These persistent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and prevent the formation of clear, error-free independent clauses.

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