Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Residing in a country where I have to communicate a foreign language can lead to serious social issues, as well as practical issues.

For my perspective, I agree with it. Because there are so many countries in a world. Although i am also living those countries in which have its own language. Some languages are difficulty and some are easy to use in daily life. Moreover, i talk about languages there are approximately more then hundred languages in the whole world. In Pakistan people talk in Urdu language and it is extremely easy for those people which are living in pakistan but i discuss about foreign countries. Such as Japan, China and America. In Japan people can talk in Japanese and in China people can communicate in Chinese and last one is American people can discussion in English. Consequently, there are lot of languages but everyone don't know all language easy to speak or communicate. One person can communicate only two or three language enough to speak and discuss. If a person has a knowledge so it can goes to another country but it don't communicate language for this country so there country don't provide job to it. Recently, i went to Japan i saw for his culture or streets.

In conclusion, language is very essential for communicate to another person. Consequently, job is not very important but language is very basic or necessary for people who have go to another countries such as Japan, India and China. Job is better when you have to know about the language.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt generally by agreeing that living in a foreign-language country causes social and practical problems, yet the development of ideas remains very limited. The student attempts to establish a clear position at the beginning with phrases like 'For my perspective, I agree with it,' but the supporting arguments quickly become repetitive and lack depth. Examples are introduced, such as mentioning Japan, China, and America, but they are not fully elaborated to show specific social or practical consequences. For instance, the mention of visiting Japan and observing its culture is disconnected from the main argument about job prospects or daily struggles. While the prompt is addressed on a surface level, the ideas are under-developed, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The overall organisation of the essay shows serious flaws in structure and progression. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the main body consisting of a single, long, rambling paragraph that moves abruptly between unrelated thoughts, such as the number of languages in the world, specific countries, and personal anecdotes. Cohesive devices are either misused or excessively repetitive, particularly transition words like 'Moreover,' 'Consequently,' and 'Although.' Referencing is often unclear, as seen in sentences like 'If a person has a knowledge so it can goes to another country but it don't communicate language for this country so there country don't provide job to it.' There is no clear logical progression, leading to a confusing reading experience, which corresponds to a Band 4.0 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, severely limiting the student's ability to convey precise meaning. Words such as 'problem,' 'language,' 'country,' and 'job' are repeated constantly throughout the text without adequate synonym variation. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'For my perspective' instead of 'From my perspective,' 'communicate a foreign language' instead of 'speak or learn a foreign language,' and 'discussion in English' instead of 'converse in English.' Attempted less common vocabulary is generally inaccurate or awkwardly phrased. While meaning can sometimes be extracted with effort, the frequent errors and restricted range place this aspect at a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on basic sentence structures that are frequently marred by severe errors. There is a total absence of well-controlled complex structures. Grammatical inaccuracies occur in almost every sentence, including subject-verb agreement issues ('people which are living', 'everyone don't know'), tense inconsistencies ('recently, i went to Japan i saw for his culture'), and word form errors ('Some languages are difficulty'). Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic throughout the response. Because errors are frequent, distort meaning in places, and impede smooth reading, the writing aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors for grammar.

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