Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Today, many people move to live in a country where they need to speak a foreign language. Some people think that this can cause serious social problems and practical problems.in the forthcoming paragraph i have justification for suggestions I completely agree with this statement because language barriers make it hard to talk to people and do daily tasks.
Social Problems
taking in to account of this trend ,When people do not know the local language, it is very hard to make friends with local people. furthermore,They feel lonely and stay only with people from their own country. Exploring this further: Because of this, they cannot mix well with the local culture or understand social rules.
now,considering the solution of this trend ,
4Doing simple things like shopping, traveling on buses, or reading signs becomes very difficult. Delving deeper into this: People also find it hard to get a good job because they cannot speak the language well. Turning to other problems: Going to a doctor is also dangerous if you cannot explain your health problem properly.
Conclusion
In conclusion, living in a foreign country with a different language brings many social and practical problems. People face trouble in daily life and talking to others until they learn the new language.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing complete agreement with the statement that living in a foreign country with a language barrier causes serious social and practical problems. However, the task achievement is heavily compromised because the text falls significantly short of the 250-word minimum, containing only 210 words. As a direct consequence of this under-length constraint, the ideas presented in both the social and practical sections remain underdeveloped and lack sufficient expansion, such as more detailed personal examples. While a clear position is established from the beginning, the lack of adequate length prevents the writer from fully exploring the prompt, capping the score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay attempts a logical organization by dividing the content into distinct sections, such as a brief introduction, a social problems section, a practical problems section, and a conclusion. However, the structural flow is severely disrupted by awkward, formulaic meta-language and memorized essay prompts like 'in the forthcoming paragraph i have justification for suggestions', 'Exploring this further:', and 'now,considering the solution of this trend ,4Doing simple things...'. Furthermore, paragraphing is unconventional and erratic, particularly with the inclusion of numbers and broken sections. While cohesive devices like 'furthermore' and 'In conclusion' are attempted, their misuse and the overall mechanical presentation limit the coherence of the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple words like 'problem', 'people', and 'hard'. There are visible attempts to use less common items, but these are often clumsy, unnatural, or inappropriately collocated, as seen in expressions like 'solution of this trend' when discussing daily practical problems. Lexical control is weak, with issues in word choice and phrasing that reflect a limited working range. Additionally, capitalization errors occur frequently, such as 'furthermore,They' and starting sentences incorrectly, which further detracts from the overall quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by basic coordinators or relative pronouns. There are frequent and systematic errors in punctuation, capitalization, and spacing, such as 'problems.in the forthcoming paragraph', missing spaces after commas, and stray numbers like '4Doing'. Complex sentence attempts are often poorly constructed or fragmented. Although the core meaning usually remains understandable, the high frequency of basic grammatical and mechanical errors significantly impedes fluent reading and prevents the achievement of a higher band.
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