Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The two maps illustrate the road access to a city hospital from the year 2007 to 2010.
Overall, the 2010 map shows the reconstruction and redesign of the previous city hospital. They have underwent some extensive modernization which constitutes a public car park, separated from the staff as in 2007, located at the eastern side of the hospital wall. Other modifications include two roundabouts, in the middle, on the southern side, joining the hospital road to provide better transit facilities. A development of bus station at the south-west corner is also noted, typically connecting the station with the two roundabouts, thus corresponds a smoother traffic flow.
Firstly, there is a map of a city hospital in 2007, highlighting the infrastructure of a combined car parking used by both the staff and public. Public car park is constructed at the north-eastern side of the wall, whereas the staff car parking is still occupied in the old place.
Secondly, Two roundabouts were clearly shown at each corner of the road, adjacent to the hospital. Additionally, a bus stop also joined both the roundabouts available on the road straight to the city hospital, whereas the old map shows that the bus stops were on the opposite sides of the road, facing city road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.0
The student has written a response about two maps of a city hospital (Task 1 Academic), whereas the prompt actually asked an opinion essay question about living and speaking a foreign language (Task 2). Because the response answers a completely different prompt, it is entirely off-topic for the specified task type. Furthermore, the length requirement of 250 words is not met, as the response contains only 210 words. Consequently, the task achievement score is severely impacted. To improve, the student must carefully read the prompt instructions to ensure they address the exact question asked and write the required minimum word count. Band score: 2.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
Despite being off-topic for the prompt, the text shows some attempt at logical organization with an overall introduction and descriptive body paragraphs. However, paragraphing is somewhat erratic, with repetitive sections discussing the 2007 and 2010 maps across multiple breaks. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'Firstly', and 'Secondly', but referencing is sometimes unclear, for instance in sentences like 'They have underwent some extensive modernization'. The arrangement provides some basic structure, placing it within the lower-middle bands for coherence. Band score: 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts some task-appropriate vocabulary related to map descriptions, such as 'reconstruction', 'modernization', 'roundabouts', and 'infrastructure'. However, there are notable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'a development of bus station' instead of 'the development of a bus station', and 'staff car parking is still occupied in the old place'. The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic spatial changes, though occasional inaccuracies exist. Band score: 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but errors in grammar and punctuation are frequent. A notable grammatical error occurs in the second paragraph: 'They have underwent', where the past participle of 'undergo' should be 'undergone'. Additionally, clauses like 'thus corresponds a smoother traffic flow' lack proper structural control. While these errors do not completely impede communication of the spatial details, they occur with enough frequency to lower the score. Band score: 5.0.
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