Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's rapidly evovling world, many students fly to abroad for their the higher study of their future. Moreover, spending time on a nations where we have to communicate a foreign language can lead serious reason on social issues and practical issues. I fully agree with this statement. This essay will articulate my own perspective along with this statement.

To commence with, there are many negative sides that people face problems to speak a foreign language. To be more precise, these problems affect as practical such as, public face insurance, banking, and many more. For example, my friend lived in the Germany, his university frees around INR 2.5 millions. He currently working as diliver boy, his monthly income is INR 100 thousand. He payed insurance as well as, his frees. As a result, my friend is unstable to maintain their expensive.

On the other side, there are also downside of the circumstance as, people face social problems that people speak a foreign language in they are liveing in a county. To elaborate further on this point, lot's of peoples face culture, black-white and other more problems. Looking at, my brother lived in the Australia. the Australia culture is a different compared to our culture. My brother faced many problem during the job time. There are many people are jugde my brother. Consequently, his wil plan to next year, his will return to the India.

In conclusion, in the recent time, huge amount of peoples aim to go to abroad but, they face lots of problem during living in foreing country. In addition, there are some negative impacts that people faced such as insurance and banking releted as well as, culture and black-white skin releted.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student addresses the prompt by expressing full agreement that living in a foreign-language country causes serious social and practical problems. A position is maintained throughout the response, supported by personal examples regarding friends and family members dealing with financial, administrative, and cultural difficulties. However, some ideas lack full development and suffer from digressions into unrelated details, such as specific tuition fees and job titles, which detract from the central argument. While the response covers the core requirements of the task, the support tends to be anecdotal and lacks the broader analysis expected at higher bands. Consequently, the performance aligns best with the Band 5 descriptors, as the task is addressed, but the ideas remain somewhat limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays basic overall organization, featuring an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing, repetitive transitions like 'to commence with' and 'on the other side,' and mechanical cohesive devices. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is faulty, making it difficult to follow the logical flow at times. Referencing is also unclear in places, such as pronoun confusion ('maintain their expensive'). Overall, the structural framework shows some organizational attempt, but the inadequacy and inaccuracy of cohesive devices place this response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on general paragraph structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted by frequent word-choice and spelling errors. Examples of lexical strain include 'evovling' for evolving, 'diliver boy' for delivery driver, 'jugde' for judge, and 'foreing' for foreign. The student attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'circumstance' and 'articulate,' but these are often used inappropriately or awkwardly. While the intended meaning can usually be understood despite the errors, the frequency of lexical inaccuracies causes noticeable strain for the reader. This performance reflects a limited, minimally adequate range characteristic of Band 5, where frequent errors impede fluency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex forms that turn out faulty. Numerous grammatical errors occur throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('his wil plan', 'his will return'), missing articles ('lived in the Germany'), and incorrect prepositions or clause structures ('problems that people speak a foreign language in they are liveing in a county'). These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and obscure the meaning of several sentences. Because error-free sentences are rare and basic structures predominate with high error density, the writing corresponds to the Band 4 descriptors.

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