Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Speaking a foreign language can cause soical problem while you are in foreign land or country. In my opinion , I cannot think that the foreign language can cause serious soical promblems becasue of make easlier to coumnucation and hepls to solve problems

To begin with, there are many reasons that can overweight the soical problems. To elaborate it, if we want to go some were we should kown about the language due to that we can easly talk to strangers and no chance of missunderstanding that can cause the soical problems. Similarly, If we are travelling to other country if we kewn their languges we can easliy solve the problem but if we donot the language then the police will take us for missunderstanding.

On the other hand, some people has agrue that living in the foreign languges can cause soical problems. To explain it, one of the core point is behavior if you kewn the languges and make mistakes that cause can cause the soical problems becasue in other countrys the rules are different due to that the people misunderstaned and cause problems.

To sum up, their are so many things we have to leran even you master the languges till you can cause soical problems. If you lean the laguages you can coummucated with them and applozies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially, presenting a rudimentary position where the writer disagrees with the prompt. However, the ideas are very limited and poorly developed throughout the essay. Furthermore, the length requirement is not met, as the response falls short of the minimum word count of 250 words. The arguments provided, such as mentioning that knowing a language helps talk to strangers or avoid police trouble, lack depth and are repetitive. To move to a higher level, the writer must fully develop relevant ideas with extended explanations and concrete examples, while ensuring the full completion of the word count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation with attempts at paragraphing, such as introducing arguments with phrases like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand'. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and the logical flow is frequently disrupted by confused transitions and repetitive structures. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes inaccurate manner, such as 'To elaborate it' or 'To explain it'. Referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult to follow the writer's line of thought. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to structure paragraphs with a clear central topic and use a wider, more natural range of cohesive devices to connect ideas smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The lexical resource is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling mistakes and word-choice errors, such as 'soical' instead of 'social', 'promblems', 'kewn' for 'known', 'easly', 'missunderstanding', and 'coummucated'. These noticeable errors require the reader to occasionally pause and decipher the intended meaning. To improve, the writer needs to expand their vocabulary range, learn correct word forms, and pay closer attention to spelling and collocations so that less common lexical items can be used with greater accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The essay displays a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense misuse, incorrect verb forms, and missing articles, such as 'if we want to go some were we should kown about the language' and 'some people has agrue that living in the foreign languges can cause'. Punctuation and agreement errors also occur regularly and cause some difficulty for the reader. To progress to a higher band, the writer must demonstrate better control over basic sentence patterns and increase the frequency of error-free sentences.

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