Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this globlised world and the advance technology speak foreign languge in living country become most conterversial issue.Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems,as well as practical problems .I will discuss both sides first and then give own opinion at the end . I strongly agree with speak a foreign language can cause serious and social problems in living country I will discuss in detalis.

On the one hand there are several benifits speak a foreign language in living country because you are do something different and the introduce some new words to local people.For instance, you also speak with someone also speak foreign language you can easily make conversation with them. These all benifits you should speaking foreign language in a living country.

One the other hand,there are alot of social problems as well as pracitical problems.For example, you cannot speak and discuss with local people easily and you should not understand whats are someonwe trying to say thats difficulties you also in the pracitical life .Secondly,you cannot find any jobs easily that is social problems this is very noticeable problem you not find work and job without attention.Instead of, you did not create any company and not started business these are social problems you speak a foreign language in the living country.

In conclusion,according to me, you some little bit benifits to speak foreign lanuage in the living country like cummunicate some one other foreigners and also make social pr

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I strongly agree”—and include relevant points about difficulty communicating with local people and finding work. However, the response only minimally develops the task: the opening promises to discuss “both sides,” but the benefits paragraph is brief and the main problems are asserted rather than explained with a specific example. The conclusion is cut off, so your final view is not fully restated. The response also does not meet the 250-word minimum: it contains 232 words, and 22 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, explain how language barriers create particular social or practical consequences and support each point with a concrete example, then complete the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable paragraph structure, with an introduction, a benefits paragraph, a problems paragraph and an attempted conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “On the one hand,” “One the other hand” and “In conclusion” help signal the intended organisation. However, progression is not consistently clear: the introduction says you will discuss both sides and give your opinion at the end, while the position is already stated there, and the final paragraph ends mid-sentence. Linking is also repetitive and sometimes inaccurate, as in “Instead of” and “Secondly” before an unclear point. Use each paragraph to develop one main idea, connect examples directly to that idea, and finish with a complete conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary includes relevant topic language such as “foreign language,” “local people,” “conversation,” “jobs” and “business,” so the general subject is usually identifiable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand: “globlised,” “benifits,” “pracitical” and “cummunicate” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “you are do something different” and “without attention.” Build accuracy with common collocations for this topic, such as “face a language barrier,” “communicate with residents” and “access employment.” Proofread spelling and choose precise words rather than repeating “problems” and “social problems.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and use basic structures to express contrast and cause, but sentence forms are limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “I strongly agree with speak a foreign language can cause” needs a grammatical clause after “agree,” while “you are do something different” has an incorrect verb construction. Other examples include “you cannot speak and discuss with local people easily” and “you should not understand whats are someone trying to say,” where clause structure and verb forms obscure the intended meaning. Articles, agreement and punctuation also need attention. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “which” and “when.”

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