Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Living in another country, and have to speak a foreign language can cause serious socal problems, as well as pratical problems. when we live in anothers countries we aslo faced difficut problems. when we talk many people. l am completely with this statement.

First of all, When we live in foreign country and speak their language. If it is very dificult for everyone. Because we was born in our country and we have not know many lauguages.over parents and government allow only our tradditional lauguage and culture. For example, we spent their lifes and regular work their culture and we always talk in our national language.Although, In my country we all speak in urdu and it is over national language. THUS, another country person live in my country he not talk me in another language. Because he live our country and he aslo teach lesson to speak in urdu.

Secondly, when my country students go to abroad . they live their and also we they go to college another country and recived a lecture their. foreign country teachers talk in their own language. That is way, He does not understand their sound and finally failed in paper. For instance, In our country we speak in urdu but in UK their people talk in english. THUS, This is the main reason, we understand another language and speak in their languale which we live their. this is a social and practical problems if we every day recived a lecture their language we move their. Because we talk another people and speak eassly many languages.

Inconclusion, In am fully agree with this statement, when we did not understand many other languages. we awaly not talk any person and we face a lot of serious and practical problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear overall view—“I am completely with this statement”—and give examples involving Urdu speakers, migration, and lectures in the UK. These points are relevant to language-related difficulties. However, the response only partially develops the task: the first body paragraph focuses mainly on cultural and language differences, while the second shifts between students’ difficulty understanding lectures and the claim that people can learn to speak more easily. The distinction between social problems and practical problems is not clearly explained, and some examples are difficult to follow. To strengthen the response, explain specific consequences, such as isolation or difficulty accessing education and services, and connect each example directly to your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and “First of all” and “Secondly” signal an attempt to organise the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first moves from language learning to national culture and then to a person living in your country, without making the links explicit. In the second, the discussion of students, lectures, failing an exam, and learning languages changes direction several times. Connectors such as “Because,” “Although,” and “Thus” are sometimes used in ways that do not show the intended relationship. Use one main idea per paragraph, develop it in a clear sequence, and make references such as “he” and “their” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “foreign country,” “national language,” “culture,” “lecture,” and “understand,” so the reader can identify the general topic. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly references to speaking another language and living in another country. Frequent spelling errors—such as “socal,” “pratical,” “dificult,” and “languale”—and imprecise phrases such as “understand their sound” can make meaning harder to follow. Build a more accurate set of phrases for social and practical consequences, and check spelling carefully. For example, “understand their sound” could be expressed as “understand the lecture,” which is more precise in this context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including clauses beginning with “when,” “because,” and “although.” However, many sentences contain errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, and articles, which sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to understand. For example, “when we live in foreign country and speak their language” is an incomplete clause, and “we was born” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. “He does not understand their sound and finally failed in paper” also shifts tense and lacks clear grammatical relationships. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check tense consistency and agreement. Accurate simple sentences should come before adding more complex clauses.

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