Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, many indviduals move from one country to another for better employement and for good education. For this statement, i strongly agree because a lot of people face language barier in foreign country during work or in society.

On the one hand, most peoples going abroad for better salaries, because in foreigner countries company give high salary package. Furthermore, mostly adults saw video on social media about abroad life and then mostly addicted for achieving this goals. However, this is not right way, because you saw social media life not real life. So, firstly we need to know deeply research about abroad life, then we makes plan for abroad country. In the contrast, most young toddlers going abroad for education and seekng better jobs.

On the other hand, individuals face different problems in society and during working hours. For instance, mostly peope do not speak Spanish and English. Firstly, if we are planing about foreigner country, the we should need to learn language and then we take next step. Students also face language problems during university hours and talking with professor and classmates. Furthermore, some time spend on language and planing.

Furthermore, most individuals face critical situation during practical work in one large city. At that place people talk in different languages. However, local worker can not talk with tthese people, i think this is huge social problem during practical work in field. In contrast, some young students adopt language because they are working with different communities and professor.

In the colclusion, I strongly agree, because language is most common problems during living in an another country, especially for non educator person. Because, some companies required labors, who can not speak local language. However, mostly students adopt language during degree period. In the end, we should need to introduce different language course i own country for better employement and development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear overall view—“I strongly agree”—and identify language barriers in work, education, and social life, which are relevant to the question. However, the response only partially develops the task: much of the first body paragraph discusses why people move abroad and how social media portrays life there, rather than explaining the resulting social or practical problems. The examples about students speaking with professors and local workers communicating with newcomers are relevant, but their consequences are not explained in enough detail. Your conclusion also introduces language courses in the home country without connecting this recommendation clearly to the problems discussed. Focus each paragraph on a specific consequence and explain how it affects daily life.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, several body paragraphs, and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise an overall structure. However, progression between ideas is often unclear, and the paragraphs do not consistently build a focused argument. For example, the paragraph beginning “On the one hand” moves from salaries to social-media influence, planning, and young students, combining several loosely connected points. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore,” “However,” and “In contrast” are frequent, but sometimes do not show a clear relationship between the sentences they connect. Some references, including “this” in “this is huge social problem,” are also vague. Organise around distinct problems—such as workplace communication and social isolation—and use transitions only where they accurately express the connection.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “language barrier,” “social problem,” “salaries,” and “university,” which helps communicate the general subject. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “local worker” and “different communities.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: examples include “indviduals,” “employement,” “peope,” and “colclusion.” Several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “mostly adults saw video,” “adopt language,” and “non educator person.” Build accuracy by learning common collocations for migration and communication, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Replacing repeated general terms with precise language would also make your points clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using clauses introduced by “because,” “if,” and “who.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to follow. For example, “if we are planing … the we should need to learn” has problems with clause structure and verb forms, while “company give high salary package” has errors in agreement and number. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “language is most common problems” and the fragment beginning “Because, some companies required.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Proofread for agreement, articles, and complete sentences.

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