Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There are many social problems when we speak foreign language in those country in which we live . They have many negative and positive impact on our society.But when we learn the foreign language like english it helps in our studies.

Many peopls said they can cause a serious social problem but in my case i disagree with this statement. My opinion is when we leran more languages it increase our knowldge. More over,it helps in our studies and well as groming our personality.

As we know, education is the key of sucess and helps us to secure our future.Learn more languages is the way is the way to get success in life. Like english is common now a days .In job interviews, podcast ,and in universities mostly people speak english.When we learn multiples of language it increase our knowldge .Moreover,we get best job opportunites because it develope our personality.For example, my brother learn multiple foreign language.once upon a time he was going a world tour with their collegues .he realize that i am comfort in every country because he understand all things whatever, they said.

Furthermore ,it develope our personality and get more opportunites in every field. One of my uncle speak many foreign langueges and he get best job opportunities in their life.

In conclusion, i think we learn multiples of langugae beacuse it helps in every field and the way of sucees

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear disagreement, particularly in “in my case i disagree with this statement,” and give examples involving your brother and uncle. However, the response focuses mainly on the benefits of learning languages for education, jobs and personal development, rather than explaining the social and practical problems named in the prompt. The examples are brief and do not show in detail why living in a foreign-language country would or would not cause these problems. The conclusion repeats your general view without weighing both sides. The response is also 15 words below the required minimum. To strengthen your answer, address social and practical difficulties directly, explain your position in relation to each, and develop specific examples with clearer reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, supporting paragraphs and a conclusion. Connectors such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help signal movement between points. However, progression is limited because several ideas repeat, especially that learning languages improves knowledge, personality and job opportunities. The relationship between the prompt and the examples is not always clear, and the brother’s story is difficult to follow. Some linking phrases are used mechanically, while punctuation and spacing sometimes interrupt the flow. Organise the body around distinct points—such as social interaction and practical communication—and make each paragraph develop one point with an explanation and a relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “foreign language,” “job opportunities,” “universities” and “personality,” so your general meaning is usually understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, with “learn,” “language,” “opportunities” and “personality” appearing repeatedly, and some word choices or collocations are unclear, such as “multiples of language” and “grooming our personality.” Frequent spelling errors—including “sucess,” “knowldge” and “opportunites”—also make the writing less clear and controlled. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for the task, including terms for communication barriers, social isolation and everyday services. Check spelling carefully and learn common word partnerships rather than translating phrases directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response includes some linking clauses, for example, “because he understand all things whatever, they said.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “when we learn more languages it increase our knowldge,” “Learn more languages is the way is the way to get success,” and “my brother learn multiple foreign language.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clear subordinate clauses; proofread each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb and complete structure.

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