Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Todays, living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social proems, as well as practical problems. I complety agree with this view due to the fact that many people was feeling that out country with poor since we speak a foreign language and face the some problems.

On the practical side, language is the main tool for making relationship. Language are not speak fluntly than you are face many problems and you have went to hospital than you do not speak with doctors thann you are face to many problems. Than we was going to market but you have not speak a foreign language that reason living in a country with you have not close many freids. Firstly, you have to went to job but you should be language skill.

On the social side,language is the most important with our sucsees life, than you have a good skills with language because you had not speak a foreign language than you have not any freinds as you will feel with alone and you should not enjoy our life and you will face the many problems.

In conclusion, ectually you have living in a country than language is the main tool for making relationship, cleary you have not language skills and do not close with many frreinds.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I complety agree”—and address both practical and social problems, which is relevant to the question. However, the reasons remain very general and are difficult to follow: the hospital and market examples are mentioned, but you do not explain specific consequences or develop them with a clear example. The social point about feeling alone is also repeated rather than supported. The response is 206 words, so it is 44 words below the 250-word minimum; 16 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. This limits the space available to explain your ideas. To strengthen the response, develop each main point with a specific situation and explain how language difficulty causes the problem.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for practical and social issues, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. However, progression within the paragraphs is weak, and several ideas run together. For example, the practical paragraph moves from relationships to hospitals, markets, friends, and jobs without clearly connecting or explaining these points. Linking words such as “Than” and “Firstly” are repeated or used in ways that do not show the intended relationship between ideas. The conclusion largely repeats the introduction rather than drawing the discussion together. Use one clear topic sentence per paragraph, organise supporting details in a logical order, and use accurate references and transitions to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “hospital,” “doctors,” “market,” “job,” and “friends,” and you attempt to express ideas about relationships and social isolation. However, the range is repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the message difficult to understand, such as “proems,” “fluntly,” “sucsees,” and “frreinds.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “making relationship” and “close with many friends.” Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions would help you explain practical consequences and social effects without relying repeatedly on “problems” and “language skills.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt to form longer sentences using “because,” “but,” and “as,” and you use paragraphs to separate the main points. However, sentence structures are very limited and frequent errors sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “many people was feeling,” “Language are not speak,” and “you have went to hospital,” which show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. Several sentences also combine multiple ideas without clear grammatical links, making the intended meaning hard to recover. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join related ideas with one well-formed clause. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, past and present verb forms, and articles, as in “go to the hospital.”

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