Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Foreign language, which can not in force in every country in the entire world, induces sundry cruxes in the way talking another country's people. Both social and practical issues can be created in foreign states when we cannot

speak them in there language.

At the very outset, if we want to speak foreign language, we have to fall in myriod problems. Apart from that, we cannot adapt to foreign people to use our indegenious language. For instance, when we cannot talk foreign people properly, a misjust situation can be created. In bargain, when we go to supermarket for buying something, we cannot comminicate them in foregin language perfectly. It is some examples of creating adverce situatuion during talking foreign language.

On the one hand, not only those aforesaid problems but also another problems create. Such as, when we going to deal with something with foreigner, we cannot talk them properly by using foreign language. As a result, the discussion is inihileted. Summing up, considering aforemention scenario. It is conspicuous that not using foreign language properly in foreign states conduces sundry problem which is exceptionally embarrassing to us.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is relevant to the topic and indicates agreement that living in a foreign-language environment can create difficulties. It mentions social communication problems and a practical example involving shopping, so the reader can identify the general position. However, the position is not clearly stated as an extent of agreement, and the ideas are only minimally explained: the supermarket example is not developed to show what could go wrong or why it matters. The discussion also repeats the general point rather than giving distinct, supported reasons. The response does not meet the required minimum length, which limits how fully the task can be addressed. State your degree of agreement directly, then develop two relevant examples with clear explanations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs and to guide the reader with phrases such as “For instance,” “As a result,” and “Summing up.” The overall movement from an introduction to examples and a conclusion is discernible. However, progression within the body is weak: several sentences repeat that communication is difficult without establishing a clear sequence of distinct points. Some linking phrases are used inaccurately or mechanically, including “On the one hand” without a contrasting “on the other hand,” and “In bargain,” which does not clearly connect the ideas. The conclusion also begins as a sentence fragment. Build each paragraph around one main idea, explain it in order, and use simpler, accurate transitions and clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts a range of vocabulary, including “adapt,” “communicate,” “discussion,” and “embarrassing,” and the topic is generally recognisable. However, many choices are inaccurate, misspelled, or unnatural, which makes the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Examples include “sundry cruxes,” “myriod problems,” “misjust situation,” and “discussion is inihileted.” Several phrases also do not fit their context, such as “cannot adapt to foreign people to use our indegenious language.” Focus first on accurate, natural collocations rather than uncommon words. For example, use “communication difficulties,” “misunderstanding,” and “make a purchase” to express the ideas clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some complex sentence forms, including conditional clauses beginning “if” and a result clause introduced by “As a result.” These show an effort to connect ideas rather than rely only on short statements. However, sentence structure and verb forms are frequently inaccurate, and some sentences are incomplete or difficult to interpret. For example, “when we going to deal with something” lacks the required auxiliary, while “when we cannot talk foreign people properly” has an incomplete grammatical pattern. “Summing up, considering aforemention scenario” is not a complete sentence. Practise forming complete subject–verb clauses, using consistent verb forms, and checking articles and prepositions. Short, accurate sentences will make your meaning clearer before you add more complex structures.

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