Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Instrumental rythms and will carry of foreign languages can create for social problems. I agree with this statement and this statement and this essay elucidates various reasons why i believe so.

To begin with myraid reasons suggest that to keep going foriegn and people are speak a differnet languages. the international languages are english but many people are does not speak and understand this language. But many country are speak in many different languages and new mases are six month learn the country languages and many persons are do not speak this language people are job less and people are go back to our country.

On the other hand, many country have but most persons are does not information in english because english is a international language. Moreover, the primeminister are go to another country for meeting and minister are hire for many translater peoples are speak for another country languages and minister are speak only for english and other nation are own language and does not understand languages and government hire the tranlater and to much pay salaries and translate persons are travel abroad for government costs becuse this person are speak for own language and the another country languages properly.

In conclusion, I am agree this statement and the people are go to abroad translate are does not go to nation in our serious condition and does not go and meeting are cancel and other country are do not understand your languages. For instance, the other country are learn for the english and many critical poisition are minister are come for our security.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear general position—“I agree”—and attempt to discuss both social and practical consequences, especially difficulty communicating and the cost of hiring translators. These points are relevant to the prompt. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the social problems are barely explained, and the practical discussion shifts to ministers and international meetings rather than developing everyday experiences of living in a foreign-language country. Several claims, such as people becoming unemployed or returning home, are difficult to follow and lack a clear explanation or example. To strengthen the response, explain specific effects on residents—for example, difficulty making friends, accessing services, or finding work—and support each with a clear, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “To begin with” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion, so there is an attempt to organise the answer. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow a clear progression. The first body paragraph moves from international languages to learning a language, employment, and returning home without showing how these points connect. The second paragraph similarly shifts from English proficiency to government meetings and translation costs. Repeated wording such as “many country” and “does not understand” also makes the development feel repetitive. Plan one main point per paragraph, explain it in a logical sequence, and use clear references to connect each example to the central argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary related to the topic, including “foreign languages,” “international language,” “translator,” and “government costs.” This shows some awareness of the subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors strain the reader’s understanding. Examples include “rythms,” “foriegn,” “myraid,” and “differnet”; phrases such as “keep going foreign” and “translate persons” are also unclear or unnatural. Try to learn accurate topic-specific collocations and use them consistently, such as “language barrier,” “communication difficulties,” and “professional interpreters.” Checking spelling and choosing precise words will make your ideas easier to understand and help avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt to form connected sentences and use basic linking expressions, but grammatical control is very limited. Errors are frequent and sometimes distort meaning, as in “many people are does not speak,” “many country are speak,” and “I am agree.” Subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction need particular attention. Some sentences combine several ideas without clear grammatical relationships, making it difficult to identify who is doing what. Practise building accurate simple sentences first—for example, “Many people do not speak English” and “Some residents struggle to find work”—then join related ideas with a correctly formed clause. Greater accuracy in basic structures is needed before attempting longer sentences.

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