Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, it is believed that speaking a foreign language in the country of residence can lead to concerning social and practical hurdles. Personally, I strongly believe this veiw because using a foreign dialect can make it hard for an individual to both fit in social gatherings as well as to accomplish tasks at practical workspaces.

Firstly, Speaking a foreign language can hinder strong bond making with natives. Because if a Pakistani boy goes to Australia for higher study, so that boy will need to speak in english.

For this reason, as english is not the mother tongue of that individual, he could not speak in that dialect much fluently;therefore, that boy can be reluctant to speak up with his collegues in the classes, and eventually that person may not be able to form good social connections;hence, that could make him soically isolated in that country due to language gap.

Another problem can be of poor understanding of tasks at workplaces. For instance, if an Indian citizen moves to USA for the purpose of job, so the foreign language e.g., English would likely be his second language. Given that, the individual probably would not be strong enough in that dialect as comapred to his American collegues or clients;therefore, That Indian individual may find it quite difficult to discern the probable jargons used by his collegues. As a result, the weaker understanding of commands to that individual could make him either do the tasks inappropriately or fully wrong, which eventually could make that individual to loose his job, in practical life due to unaccomplishment of oraginzational aims.

Admittingly, few people my not face such problems of soical-isolation and workplace misunderstandings, because few people have learnt foreign language e.g., English from early schooling days, so they usually have strong grasp over communicating in such foreign dailects. However, this sort of mastery in foreign language is usually uncommon and is found among people who have studied in English-medium educational systems.

To conclude, although there are few exceptions where people have good grasp of speaking in foreign langauges which allow them to fit-in well in distinct societies, people commonly face social and work related hardships if they are speaking in any foreign dialect in day to day life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: you strongly agree that using a foreign language can create both social and practical difficulties. The two main points are relevant and supported with examples—a student struggling to connect with classmates and a worker misunderstanding workplace instructions. The concession about people who learned English early also shows awareness that the problem does not affect everyone equally. However, the examples are hypothetical and some claims, such as the worker losing his job, are asserted rather than explained in depth. The conclusion restates your view but does not add much synthesis. To strengthen the response, explain more precisely how language barriers lead to the stated outcomes and develop the practical and social effects with balanced detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for social and workplace problems, a concession, and a conclusion. This makes the line of argument easy to follow. You also use a range of linking expressions, including “Firstly,” “For this reason,” “As a result,” and “To conclude.” At times, however, these links are overused or mechanically stacked, particularly in the long example paragraphs, where several cause-and-effect markers appear in succession. Some sentence boundaries and references are also unclear, making the progression less smooth. Aim to connect ideas through clearer sentence structure and precise referencing, and use fewer signposts where the relationship between ideas is already evident.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “socially isolated,” “discern,” “jargons,” and “organizational aims,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “strong bond making,” “practical workspaces,” “foreign dialect,” and “unaccomplishment of organizational aims.” Repetition of “individual,” “that boy,” and “foreign language” also limits flexibility. Spelling errors—including “veiw,” “collegues,” “comapred,” and “soically”—are noticeable and weaken control. Choose more natural collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, refer to “building close relationships,” “workplaces,” and “language proficiency” rather than forcing less familiar expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if a Pakistani boy goes to Australia” and clauses explaining causes and results. This gives the response some variety, but control is uneven, especially in longer sentences. For example, “Because if a Pakistani boy goes to Australia for higher study, so that boy will need to speak in english” combines incompatible linking structures, while “may make that individual to loose his job” has an incorrect verb pattern. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, and several sentences run together around semicolons. Work on forming one clear main clause with correctly attached subordinate clauses, and review verb patterns, articles, and sentence punctuation.

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