Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Certain Individuals argues that residing in a nation where one need to speak their language could cause both social and practical issues, i totally agree, this is because language barriers is a big problem as it could result in to low self esteem, isolation and carer stagnation.

On the one hand, Being unable to speak or communicate in foreign language can be challenging and frustrating, as individual is expected to speak in daliy activities either for expressions of one feeling or to contribution ,when this is bridged the person involved get frustrated due to lack of expression of feelings. For instance in the person has gone for business submit such business cant not grow and remained static , particularly in my country, where give people give a preference to their tribe, anyone in this situation there will definitely be a practical issue as the fellow will not make sales and it could put unnecessary burden on the person such as finance burden abd health relatin issues.

Furthermore, living in a foreign country where speaking and communication is difficult could amounted to isolation ,this is because on daily basis to make ends meet individual with communication barriers is faced both social and practical problems. such that it difficult to relate with citizens, particularly in urban city.Due to this, the person presume to stay indoor because of lack of o expression

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear position by saying “i totally agree” and identify relevant effects, including low self-esteem, isolation and difficulties running a business. These points address both social and practical problems, and the business example begins to illustrate a practical consequence. However, the response only partially develops the task: the business example is difficult to follow, and the discussion of isolation ends without explaining its effects or giving a supporting example. The conclusion is also absent, so your position is not reinforced at the end. The response is 21 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your ideas. Extend each main point with a clear explanation and a specific example, then add a brief conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the response opens with your opinion and uses “On the one hand” and “Furthermore” to introduce two points. The reader can identify a general movement from practical difficulties to social isolation. However, progression within the paragraphs is often unclear. For example, the sentence beginning “For instance in the person has gone for business” is hard to connect to the preceding explanation, and the final paragraph stops before completing its point. Several ideas are joined in long, loosely punctuated sentences, while references such as “this situation” and “the person” are not always precise. Use one clear main idea per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to that idea, and finish with a conclusion. More accurate, varied linking and clearer sentence boundaries would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “language barriers,” “isolation,” “low self esteem” and “practical issue.” These choices show that you can identify the main concepts. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “carer stagnation,” “business submit,” “health relatin issues” and “lack of o expression.” Spelling and word-form errors are also noticeable, including “daliy” and “frustrated” used where the sentence requires a different form. These problems sometimes make the reader work to understand your point. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations carefully; prefer clear expressions such as “career progression” and “difficulty expressing feelings” over uncertain wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example the sentence beginning “Being unable to speak or communicate…” and the explanation introduced by “this is because.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors affect clarity. Examples include “one need to speak,” “language barriers is,” “the person involved get frustrated,” and “could amounted to isolation,” which show problems with agreement and verb forms. Articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “in foreign language” and “For instance in the person has gone.” Capitalisation and punctuation errors, including lower-case “i” and missing spaces after commas, further interrupt reading. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete sentence patterns and punctuation before adding more complex clauses.

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