Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays, Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, and as well as practical peoblems. and many cause serious social problems. i am agree with the statement and explain to the statement in my opinion.

First of all, In my experience and knowledge and many people living in a country and you have to speak a foreign language, and learn to the foreign language in many country. and the some cause of very serious problems in the country. Because, They living this country and and do not have a speak in foreign language in the other country.they cause of very serious problems in the city. and the people found a some jobs and earn the money in the many country.

Second of all, In my opinion and knowledge and some people living this country and you have a speak this foreign language in many country. and some people living this country and you have found this jobs and earn the money in many country. The people living this country and earn the money for family. Because, some people living this country and they have enough this money. and earn the money in many country. and speak the foreign language in cause some serious peoblem im many country. as well as practical peoblem from some people.

In conclusion, some people living this country and earn the money and some people living this country and settle this many country. because many people earn this money in many country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You state a position—“i am agree with the statement”—and refer to both social and practical problems, so the response is connected to the topic. However, the reasons remain unclear and are not developed with relevant examples: references to people finding jobs and earning money do not explain what social or practical difficulties they face. The conclusion repeats that people earn money and settle in another country rather than summarising a supported argument. The response also does not meet the required minimum: it contains 238 words, and 17 words copied from the prompt were not counted. To strengthen the answer, explain specific effects, such as difficulty accessing services or forming relationships, and support each with an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs beginning “First of all” and “Second of all,” and a concluding paragraph. These markers show an attempt to organise the answer. However, ideas do not progress clearly within the paragraphs: statements about speaking a foreign language, finding jobs, and earning money are repeated without showing how one point leads to another. Connectors such as “Because” are sometimes used to introduce incomplete or unclear reasoning, and repeated “and” makes relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Use each paragraph to develop one distinct problem, then link its cause and effect with clear references and a relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You use basic topic-related vocabulary, including “foreign language,” “country,” “jobs,” and “earn the money,” which gives the reader some indication of the subject. However, the range is repetitive, with “living this country” and “earn the money” recurring throughout, and several word choices or spellings make meaning harder to follow, such as “peoblems” and “peoblem.” Some phrases are not natural in context, including “learn to the foreign language” and “found a some jobs.” Build a wider set of accurate expressions for social and practical difficulties, and check spelling and collocations. This would make your points clearer and reduce the strain caused by repeated, imprecise wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to use simple clauses and some longer sentences, and the reader can identify your general position. However, sentence structures are very limited and errors frequently obscure the relationships between ideas. For example, “i am agree with the statement and explain to the statement in my opinion” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “Because, They living this country” lacks a correctly formed verb. Agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “some people living this country” and the run-on opening sentence. Practise complete subject–verb sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses using “because” or “although.” Check capitalisation and punctuation when editing.

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