Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is commonly argued by a few individuals that if you living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious and social problems as weak as practical problem. this easy will discuss why I totally agree with the this proptions and my following explanations will justify my notions.
On the one hand, the main reason for the debate of foreign language. that I chose because if we live in a foreign country without knowing there language can cause some serious problem. If we are stuck in a problem it would be very hard to get help from foreign people and also in breakdowns is we needs an emotional support which again with the barrier of the language is very hard. emotion support is very important without any support we can not work and also if can not explain properly to doctor our breakdown how can we get the actual medicine.
In addition, people can face difficulty in finding jobs if they are not good at speaking a foreign language. because a good communication plays an important role to great good job. and proper guide to proper instructions
In conclusion, this essay examined why not knowing how to speak proper foreign will be a great barrier for doing any thing or sharing any thing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
Your position is clear in the opening: you say you “totally agree,” and the response gives relevant reasons, especially difficulty getting help in an emergency and finding work. However, the task is only partially addressed because these points are briefly stated rather than explained with specific examples or fuller consequences; the employment point, for instance, ends without development. The conclusion repeats the general idea but does not draw the reasons together. The response contains 209 words, so it is 41 words below the 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop each main reason with an explanation and a relevant example, and use the additional space to support your position more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning with “On the one hand” and “In addition,” and a conclusion. The ideas about emergency support and employment are relevant and placed in a broadly logical order. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first paragraph moves from getting help to emotional support and medical treatment without clearly connecting each point, while the second ends with the fragment “and proper guide to proper instructions.” Some linking phrases, including “On the one hand,” suggest a contrast that is not developed. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each explanation explicitly to the main claim, and ensure every paragraph ends with a complete, relevant point.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “emotional support,” “barrier of the language,” and “finding jobs,” which helps communicate the main concerns. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or repetitive expressions make parts difficult to understand, such as “the debate of foreign language,” “breakdowns,” and “proper guide to proper instructions.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “proptions” and “emotion support,” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise collocations and avoid repeating broad words such as “problem” and “proper.” For example, describe the specific difficulty—such as accessing healthcare or communicating with employers—rather than relying on general wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea about living abroad and a question about explaining a medical problem to a doctor. However, control is inconsistent, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the meaning. Examples include “if you living” instead of a correctly formed conditional clause, “if we live … without knowing” followed by “there language,” and “if can not explain properly” without a clear subject. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, as seen in “foreign language. that I chose” and the run-on employment paragraph. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns, articles, and complete sentence construction before adding more complex clauses.
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