Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Now, world has become global village, every day people move from one country to another country. If you do not know about language of country, it creates serious social problems along with practical problems. I firmly agree with view because it create individual's isolation and financial stress

On the one hand, individual can not communicate other citizen of society and feel isolated in country. He do not considere himself as a part of society and feel anxiety. People can not able to understand others, what they are saying. For example, a person go to doctor for checkup but do not explain the problem that he is suffering. In addition, person can not buy necessities of life in any store. This is particularly create anxiety and stress, when he is not able to conway his idea properly. therefore language is essential before going to other country.

On the other hand, it emerges financial problems for immigrants. individual can not get job due to the barrier of language. Although, a person has good grade, it can not get better job opportunities becauses of lower commnication skills. For example, a company prefer a person who know about their language because he detail customer in a good way. In sum, lack of knowlege related to foreign language create practical problems.

Wrapping up this write-up, language is important skill that every one should learn before moving to foreign country. Although it is a difficult process to learn about other language and vocabulary, it also remove social and practical problem of individual. By understanding language, a person can communicate with other citizen of society.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: you firmly agree that language barriers cause social and practical problems. You address both sides of the statement, explaining social isolation and difficulties with healthcare and shopping, then linking limited communication skills to reduced job opportunities. These examples are relevant and help answer the question. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: for instance, the link between language ability and financial stress could be developed with a clearer account of how unemployment affects an immigrant’s circumstances. The conclusion restates your view but adds little synthesis. The response covers the task well overall; fuller explanation and more specific support for some ideas would make the argument more consistently developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs organised around social and practical problems, and a concluding paragraph. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “For example” help signal the direction of the argument. The progression is generally understandable, but some linking is mechanical, and connections between sentences are occasionally unclear. For example, “In addition, person can not buy necessities” follows the doctor example without explaining how the two difficulties relate, while “In sum” appears within the second body paragraph rather than at the essay’s conclusion. Use referencing and transitions more precisely, and make each paragraph’s central point lead clearly into its supporting examples and explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “isolated,” “anxiety,” “financial problems,” “job opportunities,” and “communication skills.” This gives you enough range to discuss both social and practical consequences. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “detail customer,” “lower communication skills,” and “knowlege related to foreign language.” Spelling errors, including “conway,” “commnication,” and “becauses,” also reduce precision. Some key terms, especially “language” and “problems,” are repeated frequently. Aim to learn natural word partnerships and check spelling carefully; more precise expressions would make your ideas clearer and more fluent without changing the argument.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “If you do not know…” and a concession beginning “Although a person has good grade…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in basic sentence patterns often make the writing less clear. Examples include “individual can not communicate other citizen,” “He do not considere himself,” and “a person go to doctor.” These show problems with articles, plural forms, subject–verb agreement, and verb forms. Some sentences also have faulty construction, as in “Although, a person has good grade, it can not get better job opportunities.” Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns first, then add complex clauses and check punctuation, especially around introductory linking words.

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