Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent year, living in a country you have to speak a foreign language can cause serioul social problems become a widely debated issue. While some people believe that cause the harm the social noms and value in community center, i strongly agree with the view that affect their socity and community. This essay will explain the main reasions for my position.

The primary reason why i hold this view is that affect their values and noum their culture and traditional becouse that kind of activities harm our socity. In other words, affects our culture and value when foreign language is serious socity problems and harm our rules and regulation. their own language help to codinate their connect with global world. As a result some privacy and cultural things while as well some problems faced with thise isssue. For example society can face many problems like privacy, likage in many countries that affect indirectly in own nation.

Another importance factor to consider is that can lead with social conflict with diffrence socity people. Thise is particularly evident in every these regions in cocete of nepal many forigen people stay in thise place they can learn their neplase language they help with communication. Anotheer hand there are some disadvantage of learningt in forigen languager, There fore it is clear that its lead a serious problem in upcoming generation.

In conclusion, I firmly belive that a negative development in our socity. Thise is main becouse harm to a social noms and rule, their culture and traditional.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“i strongly agree”—and provide two body paragraphs that attempt to explain social and cultural effects, so the response is connected to the topic. However, the reasons are difficult to identify and are not adequately explained or supported. For example, the first paragraph shifts between cultural values, privacy, and “likage” without showing clearly how speaking a foreign language causes these problems. The Nepal example is also unclear and does not establish the claimed social conflict. The conclusion repeats the position but does not resolve these gaps. The response is 245 words, five words below the 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop two relevant reasons clearly and support each with a specific, explained example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable essay structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphs also begin with signposting such as “The primary reason” and “Another importance factor,” which helps indicate an intended progression. However, the ideas within paragraphs are not arranged clearly, and connections between sentences are often difficult to follow. For instance, the move from cultural values to “privacy” and then to “global world” in the first body paragraph is not explained. Linking phrases such as “In other words” and “As a result” do not consistently clarify the relationship between ideas. Pronouns such as “their” and “this issue” also have unclear references. Organise each paragraph around one reason, explain it step by step, and use linking expressions only when their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “social problems,” “community,” “culture,” “traditional,” and “communication,” and you try to use phrases such as “social conflict.” This shows an effort to discuss the subject beyond very basic language. However, vocabulary is often repetitive, and frequent spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “serioul,” “socity,” “noum,” “likage,” and “forigen.” Some expressions, such as “harm our social noms” and “in cocete of nepal,” are unclear or unnatural. These problems limit the precision of your argument. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations carefully; for example, distinguish “social norms” from “social problems” and use “cultural traditions” as a natural phrase.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including a relative clause in “living in a country you have to speak a foreign language” and a result clause beginning “As a result.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, and errors frequently make the intended meaning hard to follow. For example, “While some people believe that cause the harm…” lacks a clear subject, while “The primary reason… is that affect their values” has no grammatical subject after “that.” There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “a negative development in our socity” and the run-on sequence beginning “Another importance factor.” Practise complete subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking that each clause has a clear subject and verb.

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