Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentages of inhabitats in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, at the beggining of the given period people used to live in rented homes, however over time individuals have dramatically shifted towards personal accommodaion.

In 1918, a small proportion of residents lived in their own houses which was nearly 25% and after two decades it raised to 32% and remained stable during 1953. However, after that period it experienced a dramatic surge till 2001 and reached to it's peak by closely to 70%. After ten years the percentage of households in owned accommodaion decreased a little at 63%.

On the other hand households in rented accommodation followed a different pattern. At the beggining, the percentage for that was the highest among all the years with 76% and it fell down to 68% in 1939 and stand unchanged during 1953. Nevertheless, after that year it witnessed a sharp downward trend and reached to 32% which was the lowest proportion.In addition, it then increased a litle by 35% approximately.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response identifies the chart’s main contrast and gives a clear overview: renting was more common initially, while ownership rose over time. It reports the key turning point in 1971, when the figures were equal, and describes the ownership peak around 2001 followed by a decline. Most figures are close to the chart, including the early ownership rise and the rented share’s fall. The final rented figure is given as approximately 35%, slightly below the chart’s 36%, which is a minor discrepancy. To make the account more fully developed, explicitly compare the two series at the end: in 2011 ownership remained the larger share, at about 64% versus 36% renting. The main trends are otherwise selected and supported clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall progression: an introduction, an overview, then a paragraph on ownership and one on renting. This makes the two trends easy to follow, and transitions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships between ideas. The sequence within each paragraph is also chronological. Some linking is a little mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “after” and “after that period,” and the final sentence begins “In addition” even though it describes a further stage in the same trend rather than an additional point. A more direct comparison between the series at the end would strengthen the progression. Overall, the organisation is logical and the reader can follow the information without difficulty.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

There is an adequate range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “remained stable,” “dramatic surge,” “peak,” and “downward trend.” These choices help communicate the main movements, although some are imprecise or not fully natural in this context: “dramatic surge” overstates a gradual rise, and “personal accommodation” is not a suitable substitute for home ownership. Spelling errors such as “beggining,” “inhabitats,” and “accommodaion” are noticeable, though the intended meaning is generally clear. Some phrases are also awkward, including “reached to its peak” and “fell down.” Aim for accurate, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully; this would make the vocabulary more precise and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “however” and “after,” and most relationships between ideas remain understandable. Some grammatical errors occur, especially with verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “it raised to 32%” should use a passive form such as “it rose to 32%,” while “and stand unchanged” needs a past-tense verb, “stood.” The phrase “reached to 32%” also has an unnecessary preposition, and “which was nearly 25%” has an unclear reference to the percentage. Punctuation is occasionally faulty, as in “lowest proportion.In addition,” where a space is missing after the full stop. More consistent control of past-tense reporting and sentence boundaries would improve accuracy.

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