Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Hey Sir!

The chart shows the percentage of his own hosuehold accomodation between 1918 and 2011 the expense of own house were in 20 percente and increased till 2001 it touch to the seventy percente amd 2011 it decrese near by five percente. So we saw that our own house accoumadation were incresed beteem 1918 and 2011 from twnenty percente to sixety five percente.Rather than other side the accommodation of rental is betwwn 1918 and 2011 were around seventy five percente and decreased by five percente every year but in 1939 and 1953 were remain same around sixety eight percente and it decrease till 2001 and in 2011 it again increased by thirty eight percente. So the chart shows the accommodation expense of own hiuse were increased rather than the accommodation of rental house very decreased till 2001 and again increasd by thirty eight percente in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad contrast correctly: ownership rises over the period while renting generally falls, and you note that the two figures meet at about 50% in 1971. However, the response only partially reports the chart’s main features. The overview is repeated rather than developed, and several details are inaccurate: ownership reaches about 69% in 2001, not 70% exactly, then falls to 64% in 2011, rather than 65%; renting rises to 36% in 2011, not 38%. The claim that renting decreased by five percentage points every year is also unsupported, as the changes vary and some years show no change. The response is three words below the required minimum. Include a clearer overview and select accurate key figures to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic chronological order and uses a few linking expressions, such as “Rather than other side” and “So the chart shows,” to connect the ownership and rental trends. However, the ideas are presented as one long paragraph, with no clear separation between an overview and supporting details. Several points are repeated, especially the general claim that ownership increased and renting decreased, while the sequence of figures is difficult to follow. Some connections are unclear, and the repeated use of “and” creates a run-on effect. Organise the response into a short overview followed by focused detail paragraphs, and use linking words to show comparisons and changes more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “increased,” “decreased,” and “remained same,” so the reader can recognise the general subject and trends. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the expense of own house,” “accommodation expense,” and “it touch to the seventy percente.” Frequent spelling errors—including “hosuehold,” “accomodation,” and “percente”—also make the response harder to read. Use standard terms for the categories and describe figures with precise language, for example, “the proportion of households in owner-occupied accommodation rose.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating the same basic verbs throughout.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas using clauses, for example, “it decreased till 2001 and in 2011 it again increased,” but sentence structures are limited and often difficult to control. Errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently: “the accommodation … were,” “it touch,” and “were remain same” do not form accurate grammatical patterns. The opening also lacks a clear, complete sentence structure, and long strings of clauses are joined without effective punctuation. These problems sometimes make relationships between events unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons and subordinate clauses; for example, “Ownership rose to 69% in 2001, before falling to 64% in 2011.”

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