Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar-chart illustrates the proportion of owned and rented occupied dwellings in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Units are meadured in fraction.

As shown in the given chart, the percentage of households in owned accomodation are significantly shoot up between the period of 1918 to 2011. Whether, ratio of households in rented accomodations made a huge decline. There are various fluctuations, representing the comparison between both categoreis.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report its broad direction: ownership rises overall while renting declines. However, the response is far too brief to summarise the main features adequately, and the overview is vague: “significantly shoot up” does not capture that ownership peaked at about 69% in 2001 before falling to 64% in 2011. You also omit key comparisons, including the two categories meeting at 50% in 1971 and the reverse movement in the final decade. The length requirement is not met: the response has 61 words, 89 short of the minimum. Develop a clear overview and support it with selected figures and comparisons from the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the chart, then gives a general statement about the two trends. The contrast signalled by “Whether” appears intended to connect the ownership and rental patterns, but it does not function correctly here, and “There are various fluctuations” adds little clear progression. The ideas are not developed into a complete summary, and there is no paragraphing to distinguish an overview from supporting details. To improve, organise the response into a short introduction, an overview of the main trends, and a paragraph comparing selected years. Use clear links such as “By contrast” and “However” only where they accurately express the relationship between the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “households,” and “decline,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes parts of the summary awkward: “Units are meadured in fraction” is unclear, and “significantly shoot up” is not an appropriate collocation for describing a trend. There are also spelling errors in “meadured,” “accomodation,” and “categoreis.” Choose precise, conventional language for data reporting, such as “the proportion increased” or “the share of rented households fell,” and check spelling carefully. More varied trend vocabulary would help you describe the chart accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both a simple introductory sentence and longer statements, but the range of sentence structures is narrow and errors recur. In “the percentage of households in owned accomodation are,” the singular head noun “percentage” requires “is”; the sentence also needs a clearer construction, such as “the percentage of households in owner-occupied accommodation rose.” “Whether, ratio of households…” is not a complete or correctly formed contrast clause, and “between the period of 1918 to 2011” uses an incorrect time expression. These problems make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and straightforward comparison structures before attempting more complex sentences, and proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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