Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of households in owned and rented accommodation in two nations of United Kingdom from 1918 to 2011

Overall,most of the individuals lived in rented houses in 1918 but it showed a downward trend in contrast the most of the people but their own houses and it noticed a upward trend

The owner of the houses is just 22% in 1918 but the numerous people buy their own houses and it increased rapidly in 1971 reached upto 50% of total population lived in their own houses. In 2011 data showed that 65% of population owned the accommodation

In contrast with the rising number of owners the rented population declined rapidly in 1918 it contian the proportion of 78% but in 1971 it reached upto 50% subsequently it showed downward trend until 2011 the 35% of total population lived in rented accommodation which is far less than 1918

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided key data points to support your summary. You covered the start and end points as well as the significant crossover period around 1971. However, the response lacks a clear overview paragraph; the current overview is embedded within the introduction and contains some grammatical confusion. To improve, ensure you clearly separate your overview from the introduction and provide a more precise summary of the overall trends without repeating specific data points in the overview section. The task is addressed, but the development of the comparison between the two categories could be more sophisticated.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Phrases like 'In contrast with' and 'subsequently' are used, but the flow between sentences is often interrupted by grammatical errors. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the sentence structure makes it difficult to distinguish between the two trends. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the logical flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the trends (e.g., 'downward trend', 'increased rapidly'). However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and spelling errors, such as 'contian' instead of 'contained' and 'the numerous people buy' instead of 'the number of people buying'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and ensure that your word forms (nouns vs. verbs) are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the owner of the houses is just 22%'), tense consistency ('data showed that 65%... owned'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary articles and prepositions, which occasionally impedes the clarity of your message. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction, correct verb tenses for reporting data, and proofreading for punctuation will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

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