Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The bar chart illustrates the way people lived in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011 by comparing the proportions of those who lived in their own place versus those who rented their housing.
Overall, with the passing of time, more people started to own their places to live rather than paying for the rented accommodations.
From 1918 to 1961, there were more people paying for their housing as compared to those who actually lived as the owner of their place. In 1918, there lived almost 80% of households in rented place, while the rest stayed at their own accommodation. During 1939, 70% of people lived in rent, and this remained same till 14 years later. The declining trend for people paying rent for their housings continued for years after that and leveled with those owning their place in 1971.
After 1971, the proportion of people who owned their accommodation started to grow, going from 60% in 1981 to slightly under 70% in 2001. Finally, 2011 saw a slight fall for such households as compared to 2001, however, the proportion still remained over 60%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5
The response successfully covers the main trends and provides a clear overview of the data. You have identified the key shift from rented to owned accommodation and highlighted the crossover point in 1971. The data is generally accurate, and you have made relevant comparisons between the two categories. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with maximum precision; for instance, the phrase 'remained same till 14 years later' is slightly vague. Including more specific data points for the final years would also strengthen the analysis. Overall, the task is well-addressed with a clear focus on the significant changes over the period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that follow a chronological progression. The use of cohesive devices such as 'From 1918 to 1961', 'After 1971', and 'Finally' helps guide the reader through the timeline. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different time periods. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions could be more sophisticated to avoid a slightly mechanical feel. Referencing is clear throughout, and the progression of ideas is easy to follow, meeting the requirements for a Band 7 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the trends, such as 'proportions', 'declining trend', and 'leveled with'. However, there is some repetition of basic phrases like 'people lived in' and 'paying for their housing'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'housing' or 'accommodation' and use more precise verbs to describe the movement of the data, such as 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', or 'stabilized'. The current vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the flexibility and precision required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are some minor grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'there lived almost 80% of households' (which should be 'almost 80% of households lived') and 'remained same' (which requires an article: 'remained the same'). Punctuation is generally correct, and the errors present do not impede communication. To achieve a higher score, aim for more complex sentence structures and ensure greater accuracy in subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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