Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
the provided vertical bar graph illustrates the information about the proportion of the residents in occupied and rental accommodation in two nations from 1981 to2011. the data has been calibrated in percentage.
overall, it is evident that in the initial year england showed the less percentage and on the other hand wales depicts the highest proportion in the begin of the period while by 2011 after some fluctuation england showed gradual increased and wales decreased over the period.
looking at the initial information, by year 1918 to 1961 the proportion of owned and rented accommodation were declined and gradually rose respectively in england and wales. by 1971 they become constant and equally to each other.
moving further to the remaining information, from 19891 to 2011 both countries showed fluctuation and in the end england showed the 65% and wales demonstrates 35%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the graph, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the dates (e.g., citing 1981-2011 when the graph spans 1918-2011). The summary of trends is also confusing; for instance, stating that proportions 'declined and gradually rose' is vague and does not clearly distinguish between the two categories (owned vs. rented). To improve, ensure you carefully read the data axes and provide a more precise description of the trends, ensuring you meet the length requirement to fully develop your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by unclear referencing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'moving further to the remaining information' feel forced and do not effectively link the ideas. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping data by category or time period rather than jumping between them.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'showed', 'proportion', and 'information' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'calibrated in percentage' and 'in the begin of the period'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a downward trend'. Additionally, ensure you proofread for basic spelling and word-form errors, such as 'increased' instead of 'increase' and 'equally' instead of 'equal'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('england showed the less percentage'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization at the start of sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct tense usage for historical data, and ensure that you use a mix of simple and complex structures to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.
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