Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The bar grpah illustrates the percentage of rented and owned household accomodation in England and Wales between the year 1918 and 2011.

Overall, households in rented accomodation dominated the year 1918 and a steady and gradual decline was seen in its trend before a slight recovery in the last year 2011. However, personally own property accomodation was lowest at the beginning and it continously increased before a slight downward trend at the end.

In the year 1918, nearly 80% people prefered rented houses and only less than 20% peolpe manged to get their own homes. But ,in 1939 , rented households experienced a sharp decline constituting less than 70% of all households while owned houses raised to above 30%. in the year 1953 the trend remained essentialy the same for both households with same figures as of 1939. Rented accomodationn in the year 1961 declined to less than 60% while own accomodation raised to near 40%.

In the year 1971, both type of accomodations became equal to each other, 50% for each tyoe. Upward trend continued for the owned households in the year 1981 with 60% people prefered their own houses . While rented property was only 40%. Year 1991 and 2001 were the peak years for owned households as it hits highest of all times with nearly 70%, and also ;lowest for rented households at just 30%. Year 2011 witnessed the quite reverse in the trend with rented households gain slight upward trend around 35% and less than 65% were the own households which was less than previous year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the trends. You successfully identified the main features, such as the crossover point in 1971 and the peak of home ownership in the 1990s/2000s. However, the analysis could be improved by grouping the data more effectively rather than listing every year chronologically, which makes the report feel slightly mechanical. The summary is accurate, but ensure that the 'overall' section highlights the most significant contrast rather than just describing the start and end points. You have met the requirements well, but more analytical synthesis would elevate the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use cohesive devices like 'However', 'In the year', and 'While' to link sentences. However, some transitions feel repetitive, and the use of punctuation is occasionally awkward, such as the semicolon usage in 'and also ;lowest'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed data analysis. To improve, try to vary your cohesive devices further and ensure that referencing between sentences remains smooth and natural throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'dominated', 'sharp decline', and 'witnessed'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'grpah', 'accomodation' (consistently misspelled), 'prefered', and 'manged'. These errors are noticeable but do not impede communication. To reach a higher band, you should work on spelling accuracy and attempt to use more precise collocations, such as 'home ownership rates' instead of 'owned household accomodation'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the information clearly, but the recurring spelling mistakes limit the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'owned houses raised to above 30%' (should be 'rose') and 'both type of accomodations' (should be 'types'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement, such as '80% people' (should be '80% of people'). While these errors are frequent, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of the data. Increasing the variety of complex structures and proofreading for basic verb tense consistency would help improve your accuracy.

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