Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart demonstrates the percentage of the households in owned and rented accommodation in the England and Wales in the year 1918 and 2011.

Overall, In the early year of 1918 to 1961 almost huge adoption of households in rented accommodation. In contrast, 1981 to 2011 England and Wales people more prefering owned habitats.

In 1918 only 22% owned houses. which was the least percentage over the decade. Whereas, 78% was the preference of rented accommodation. In the year 1939 and 1953 there is completely stability which accounts 32% and 68% for owned accommodation and rented accommodation respectively. In the year 1961 40% of individuals were intrested in personal property. However, 59% pupils for rented property.

There was no sudden changes in the year 1971. However, 2001 and 1991 was the highest year of owning household accounts 69% and 68% . Whereas in the same year least intrest in rented accommodation. In 1981 60% for owned houses which increased 62% in 2011 and 40% for rented in 1981 and 35% for 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main trends and provides data points to support the description. However, the overview is somewhat weak and contains inaccuracies; for instance, stating there was 'no sudden changes in the year 1971' is not a clear analytical summary. The data selection is generally relevant, but the reporting of figures is occasionally imprecise or confusing, such as the reference to 'pupils' instead of households. To reach a higher band, ensure the overview highlights the most significant shifts—specifically the crossover point where ownership overtook renting—and avoid listing data points without clear comparative analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of information. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'In the early year of 1918 to 1961'. Some transitions between sentences are abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. While the logical flow is generally maintained, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive structure of the sentences limit the effectiveness of the cohesion. Improving the variety of transition signals would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of inappropriate word choice, such as 'habitats' to describe housing and 'pupils' to refer to the general population. Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'intrested' and 'intrest'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying heavily on basic terms like 'owned' and 'rented'. To improve, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to trends and data, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'surpassed', and ensure words are used in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in the England and Wales'), incorrect verb forms ('more prefering'), and issues with subject-verb agreement ('there is completely stability'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of full stops and commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for article usage and verb tense consistency would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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