Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph demonstrate that proportion of household owned and rented house in England and wales from 1918 and 2011.
To begin with , the percentage of household rented was highest from 1918 to 1961 whereas , it showed that household owned accommodation was lowest in the same year. Moreover , In 1971 year , the proportion of household owned and rented had remains same constant in England and wales .
Furthermore , The household owned percentages were rising dramatically in England from 1981 to 2011. Last but not least, the house hold rented had declined gradually between 1981 and 2011.
Overall, The percentage of household rented and owned remained same in 1971 but it showed some household rented and owned up and down in the all years .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While you have identified the main trends, the analysis is quite superficial. You mention the 1971 intersection and the general trends for 1981–2011, but you lack specific data points (percentages) to support your claims, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response. Furthermore, the overview is repetitive and does not clearly highlight the most significant changes over the entire period. To improve, ensure you include specific figures from the chart and provide a more comprehensive summary of the overall trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally misused, such as 'Last but not least' which is not appropriate for a data report. The progression of ideas is logical, but the transitions between sentences feel disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the summary of the trends is vague. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words that connect the data points more fluidly rather than relying on simple sentence starters.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'household', 'owned', and 'rented' without variation. There are also issues with word formation and collocation, such as 'remains same constant' and 'up and down'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'surpassed', or 'accounted for'. Additionally, ensure you use accurate terminology for the subject matter, such as 'home ownership rates' instead of just 'household owned'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The bar graph demonstrate', 'household owned... had remains'), missing articles ('in 1971 year'), and awkward phrasing ('the proportion of household owned and rented had remains same constant'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Practice combining simple sentences into complex ones using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.
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