Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given task is in the form of bar chart .Showcasing the information about households owing and renting accommodation in England and wales. The year under observation are 1918 and 2011.It is clear and coherent representation.
Overall ,in terms of households owing and renting accommodation, the data of households owing was highest in first four year, but after that household renting took the lead in the given time span.
To begin with , in 1918 the top seat was notched by owned household with 78 %
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 86 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The overview is underdeveloped, and the response stops abruptly after providing only one data point from 1918. To improve, you must provide a comprehensive summary that covers the entire period (1918–2011), highlights the main trends, and makes clear comparisons between the two categories throughout the timeframe. The current length prevents a full development of the key features required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and an overview, the lack of development makes it difficult to assess the use of cohesive devices. The sentences are fragmented and do not flow into a coherent report. To improve, ensure you structure your response with a clear introduction, a distinct overview paragraph, and two body paragraphs that group data logically, using linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'top seat was notched' are slightly unnatural in this context. There are also errors in basic terminology, such as 'owing' instead of 'owned'. To achieve a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a significant increase', or 'surpassed'. Focus on using precise terminology related to data description rather than informal or imprecise phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains several grammatical errors, such as 'The year under observation are 1918 and 2011' (should be 'is') and 'bar chart .Showcasing' (incorrect punctuation and sentence structure). The sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that every sentence is complete. Practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences, and pay close attention to punctuation, particularly avoiding spaces before periods.
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