Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart provided the information on the proportion of households in possessed in leased accommodation in England and Wales. Overall, it is evident that owned accommodation percentage went on surging over the years.

To commence with in 1918, only around 22% households were in owned accommodation while on the contrary approximately 78% households were in rental. The numbers changed in 1939 with around about 31% houses were owned and around 69% were rental. The percentage remained the same in 1953. However in 1961, 41% accommodations were owned while 59% were rental.

Furthermore in 1971, both owned and rental became 50%. In 1981, the owned houses became 60% while the rental accommodation became 40%. In 1991 and 2001, the percentage of possessed and leased approximately remained the same with owned accommodation having proportion around 69% and rental became 31%. It fluctuate in 2011 with owned accommodations had around 64% whereas rental properties had 36%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and providing data for the years mentioned. You successfully highlighted the overall shift from a rental-dominated market to an ownership-dominated one. However, the report is essentially a list of data points. To reach a higher band, you should group the data more effectively—for example, by identifying the period of most rapid growth or comparing the two categories more dynamically rather than just listing percentages year by year. The overview is present but could be more analytical regarding the overall trend.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organized chronologically, which makes the information easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'However' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is quite weak; the entire body of the report is essentially one long paragraph. Breaking the information into logical paragraphs—perhaps one for the early period and one for the later period—would improve the structure. Additionally, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother to avoid a repetitive 'subject-verb-data' structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the data, such as 'proportion', 'surging', and 'fluctuate'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choices and inaccuracies. For example, 'possessed in leased accommodation' is not standard English, and 'around about' is redundant. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'numbers' and 'houses'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'a steady climb', 'a marginal decline', or 'the dominant form of housing'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. For instance, 'the proportion of households in possessed in leased accommodation' is grammatically incorrect. You also have issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'it fluctuate in 2011' (should be 'fluctuated') and 'owned accommodations had around 64%'. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structures are often repetitive, which limits the range of your writing.

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