Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in england and wales between 1918 and 2011.
Firstly, in 1918 the ratio of household rented accommodation is 79 percent, And the ratio of owned accommodation is 23 percent. Going ahead if we see the chart in 1939 the ratio of rented housing is 68 percent, And the owned housing is low at 32 percent. Secondly, if we see the ratio of 1953 it is almost same as 1939. Now if we move forward and have a look in 1961 ratio of owned housing is rises to 41 percent, And the ratio of rented housing is decrease to 58 percent. Coming to the 1971 the ratio in 1971 is equal in both sides rented and owned accommodation 50 percent. In 1981 ratio of rented housing is decrease and the ratio of owned housing rises. In 1981,1991,2001 and 2011 the ratio of owned and rented accommodation is almost same, Sometimes it rises and some it decreased.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the task by describing the trends in owned and rented accommodation. However, the analysis is limited. You have listed data points chronologically but failed to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends, such as the long-term shift from renting to owning. The final paragraph is vague, stating that figures are 'almost same' without providing specific data or meaningful comparisons. To improve, you should group information logically (e.g., periods of growth vs. stability) and ensure the main features are clearly identified in an overview paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised chronologically, which provides a basic structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'if we see' and 'the ratio of'. Paragraphing is insufficient; the response is essentially a list of sentences rather than a cohesive report. There is a lack of logical progression between ideas, and the transition between the data points feels disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') and ensure each paragraph has a clear thematic focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'ratio' and 'housing' throughout the text, which makes the writing monotonous. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'is rises' and 'is decrease', which are grammatically incorrect and hinder the flow. To achieve a higher band, you need to use a broader range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and ensure you use the correct word forms (e.g., 'rose' instead of 'is rises').
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Examples include 'the ratio... is rises', 'is decrease', and 'it is almost same'. These errors are persistent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. The sentence structures are simple and lack variety; there is an over-reliance on basic 'subject + verb' patterns. To improve, focus on mastering the use of past tense verbs for historical data and practice forming complex sentences using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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