Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar graph reveal the percentage of families lives in own and rented places in England and Whales from 1918 to 2011. the data is give in percentage.
From the given information it is lucid that, in 1918 families live in rented accommodation was 75% on the other hand families who have own accommodation was 22% . the percentile of families on rented place is started to decline till 1971 whereas families have own place their percentage started to incline and remain same in 1971 .
From the remaining information it is given that ,after1971 percentage of rented accommodation started to decrease till 2001 and started to rise at 35% in 2011. Moreover on the other hand , The percentage of own households accommodation is gradually risen till 2001 and slightly decreased to 2011 at 65%.
In conclusion ,the rented accommodation have higher percentage as compared to own accommodation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the initial percentages in 1918 and the trends up to 2011. However, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which impacts the depth of the analysis. While the main trends are identified, the description of the data is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant changes. The conclusion is also inaccurate, as it states that rented accommodation had a higher percentage overall, which contradicts the data showing that owned accommodation became the dominant form for most of the period. The response would benefit from more precise data reporting and a clearer summary of the overall shift in trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and occasionally awkward, such as 'From the given information it is lucid that' and 'Moreover on the other hand'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, moving from the start of the period to the end, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing is basic. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, avoiding repetitive sentence starters.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'families', 'places', and 'percentage'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'percentile' (which refers to a statistical measure, not a percentage) and 'incline' (which is not typically used to describe a trend in this context). The phrasing 'families lives in own and rented places' is grammatically incorrect and uses informal vocabulary. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', or 'predominant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The bar graph reveal', 'families lives'), incorrect verb tenses ('is started to decline'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage would significantly improve the clarity and quality of your writing.
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