Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar graph illustrates the number of households owned and for leased households by individuals over the years in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall, the bar graph shows that in 1918 in England and Wales the household in rented accommodation was decreasing over the decades but slightly increased in the last year. Moreover, the household owned accommodation is increasing over the years until 2001 and fell a little in 2011.

On the other hand, accommodation that is owned is increasing thru the years. The graph depicts that in 1918 there is over 20 percent of the household possessed a house, but it increased in the year 1939 to 1953 recorded to have almost 30 percent of the individuals now in a owned a property. It is continuing to rise from 1961 for nearly 40 percent. By 1971 it shows that 50 percent of the individuals are the owning a house it reached 60 percent in 1981 and after 10 years it gradually increased to 70 percent until 2001. However, after a decade it slightly decreased and recorded nearly 70 percent.

Furthermore, in leased accommodations the chart compares that from 1981 individuals has rented a household for nearly 80 percent it decreased by 70 percent in the year 1939 and 1953. While from the year 1961 to 1981 it gradually decreasing from 60 percent to 40 percent. By 1991 to 2001 it shows that the percentage has fell further to 30 percent and by the year 2011 it is slightly increased to almost 40 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

Sinasaklaw ng tugon ang mga pangunahing katangian ng chart, na tinutukoy ang mga trend para sa parehong owned at rented accommodation. Gayunpaman, ang pagsusuri ay medyo hindi consistent. Halimbawa, ang paglalarawan sa datos ng rented accommodation ay naglalaman ng mga makabuluhang kamalian tungkol sa mga numero (e.g., stating 80% in 1918 when the chart shows roughly 75%). Ang overview ay naroon ngunit kulang sa malinaw na synthesis ng ugnayan sa pagitan ng dalawang kategorya. Bagama't natukoy ang mga pangunahing trend, ang kakulangan sa katumpakan sa pag-uulat ng mga data point ay naglilimita sa pagiging epektibo ng buod.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

Ang sanaysay ay nakaayos sa mga talata, na tumutulong sa mambabasa na sundin ang istruktura. Gayunpaman, ang lohikal na pag-unlad ay paminsan-minsang nahahadlangan ng awkward na pagpapahayag at paulit-ulit na istruktura ng pangungusap. Ang mga cohesive device ay ginagamit, gaya ng 'Moreover', 'On the other hand', at 'Furthermore', ngunit kung minsan ay ginagamit ang mga ito nang mekanikal o hindi angkop, gaya ng paggamit ng 'On the other hand' upang ipakilala ang isang punto na hindi naman salungat sa naunang talata. Ang pag-refer ay kung minsan ay hindi malinaw, na nagiging sanhi upang maging medyo putol-putol ang daloy ng impormasyon.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Ang bokabularyo ay karaniwang sapat para sa gawain, ngunit ito ay limitado at paulit-ulit. May ilang pagkakataon ng hindi tumpak na pagpili ng salita, gaya ng 'leased households' sa halip na 'rented accommodation' at 'individuals now in a owned a property'. Sinusubukan ng mag-aaral na gumamit ng ilang mapaglarawang wika, ngunit makitid ang saklaw, at may mga error sa collocation na kung minsan ay nagpaparinig sa teksto na hindi natural. Ang mas tumpak na terminolohiya na may kaugnayan sa mga trend at pag-uulat ng datos ay magpapabuti sa score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

Gumagamit ang tugon ng halo ng simple at kumplikadong istruktura ng pangungusap, ngunit may madalas na mga error sa gramatika sa kabuuan nito. Ang mga halimbawa ay kinabibilangan ng 'the household in rented accommodation was decreasing' (dapat ay 'the percentage of households'), 'individuals are the owning a house', at 'it gradually decreasing'. Ang bantas at consistency sa verb tense ay may problema rin. Bagama't ang mga error na ito ay hindi lubos na humahadlang sa komunikasyon, ang mga ito ay madalas sapat upang magmungkahi ng kakulangan sa kontrol sa mga kumplikadong istruktura, na nagpapanatili sa score sa range na 5.5 hanggang 6.0.

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