Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart shows the proportion of business towards social media between 2012 and 2016.
Overall, Large businesses are with highest proportion (with 98%) in presence of social media, where small businesses accounts for the lowest (with 49%). In 2016, all the businesses have rise than previous years, substantially.
Medium and Small businesses are having almost similar proportions in 2013, 2015 and 2016. Large businesses are overall constant, where as Small businesses are increasing steadily for three years. In 2015, All businesses decline with almost 40% of its proportion ; However, In 2016 all businesses increased sharply than recent years.
Medium businesses have some fluctuations as it increased for two years and decreased with around 20% in next year. Large businesses ranks first when we compare with other businesses in 2012. All businesses were effected in 2015 and recovered in next year. Medium business proportions were almost constant in 2013 and 2014.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0
The response fails to address the task provided. The prompt asks for a summary of a chart regarding household accommodation in England and Wales (1918–2011), but the student has written about business social media usage (2012–2016). This is a complete misinterpretation of the task. While the student attempts to report trends and comparisons, the content is entirely irrelevant to the provided image. Consequently, the response cannot be assessed for accuracy regarding the data, leading to a very low score for task achievement as the prompt requirements were not met.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the logical progression is weak because the information presented does not relate to the actual data. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'However', and 'In 2015', but they are often used mechanically or to connect ideas that are factually confusing or contradictory. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the intended argument. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively support the development of a coherent summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms like 'proportion', 'businesses', and 'increased'. There are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'business towards social media' and 'all the businesses have rise'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. While the meaning is generally understandable at a basic level, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple, often misused, terminology restricts the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. Examples include 'Large businesses are with highest proportion', 'all the businesses have rise than previous years', and 'All businesses were effected'. There is a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but the control is poor, leading to frequent errors in verb tense, preposition usage, and subject-verb agreement. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters in the middle of sentences.
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