Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart gives information about how many people live in their private and rented house accommodation from 1918 to 2011 in two different country which are England and Wales.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that rented accommodation was presented with the highest amount while it decreased gradually over the period. The Private house was stand with low proportion whereas it increased till 2001 and decreased with very small percentage during the period.
To begin with, the private house owned people was stood with the highest proportion in 1918 by almost 78% while the rented house people was stood with very low amount to compare with private house owned people.
In 2011, the private owned house people was presented with very high proportion in 2011 by almost 65% whereas the rented house peole
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence in the final paragraph. While the introduction and overview attempt to identify trends, the body paragraphs are underdeveloped and fail to provide a comprehensive summary of the data. The analysis of the trends is inaccurate; for instance, the student claims rented accommodation was the 'highest amount' throughout the period, which contradicts the data showing a clear crossover. Due to the incomplete nature of the response and the failure to reach the minimum length, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive way, such as the frequent use of 'while' and 'whereas'. Referencing is often unclear, and the lack of a conclusion or a completed final paragraph disrupts the logical flow of the response. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is weak, and the overall structure feels disjointed due to the abrupt ending.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrasing such as 'highest amount', 'low proportion', and 'private house owned people'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'private house was stand' and 'rented house people'. The lack of variety in vocabulary prevents the student from describing the trends with precision. To improve, the student needs to incorporate more academic collocations related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The Private house was stand'), incorrect word order, and awkward phrasing ('rented accommodation was presented with the highest amount'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some unsuccessful attempts at complex structures. Punctuation is generally functional, but the overall control of grammar is weak, with errors occurring in almost every sentence.
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