Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar chart illustrates the information about England and Wales between 1918 and 2011 the stated that the proportion of households owned and rented accomodation .
Overall,it evident that most popular was households in rented accomodation. At the beginning the highest rate of households in rented over a period and at the ending it seen been sharp decline,While households in owned accomodations showed least figure at beginning.However ,the percentage of households owned increased significantly.
Firstly , Households in rented accomodation represented highest proportion in 1918 about 75% whereas it stood at moderate in both years in 1939 and 1953 were 68% respectively.In addition 1961 and showed decreased gradually followed by approximately 58% while remaining years in 1971 stood at same level 50% but sharp decline in 1991 ,2001 about 30 to 40% while 2011 represented slightly increased.
Households in owned accomodations showed slightly increased years by years in 1918 ,1939 and 1953 about 20% to 50% but in 1981 and 1991 it reached same level by 69% but in
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main features of the chart, but the analysis is inconsistent and lacks clarity. While you identify the general trends, the data reporting is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that rented accommodation stood at 50% in 1971 and then saw a 'sharp decline' in 1991. The overview is present but poorly articulated, and the response ends abruptly mid-sentence, leaving the task incomplete. To improve, ensure you select key data points accurately and provide a clear, coherent summary of the overall trends without relying on vague descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transition between ideas is mechanical and often confusing. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as the repetitive use of 'while' and 'whereas' without clear logical connection. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. The abrupt ending further disrupts the coherence of the response. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'accomodation' (misspelled throughout) and 'least figure'. You rely on a limited range of words to describe trends, such as 'increased' and 'decreased', without using more precise academic vocabulary like 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', or 'remained stable'. The lack of variety and the persistent spelling errors limit the score. To reach a higher band, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description and ensure you proofread for common spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as fragments and run-on sentences (e.g., 'At the beginning the highest rate of households in rented over a period and at the ending it seen been sharp decline'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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