Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The Given vertical bar graph depicts the information on households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.The data has been calibrated into percentage.

Overall,it is crystal clear that the percentile of rented accommodation was continuously declining whereas the ratio of owned households was keeps on inclining in the given period of time.

At a fleeting glance,in the year 1918 rented accommodation was at their peak rate near about 80 percent. however owned accommodation was at their lowest rate around 20 percentile. It's followed by in 1939 there was slightly increase in owned accommodation. Their was no change has been shown in 1953 . Their was 20 percent difference in owned and rented accommodation during 1961 .

Moreover, their was shown that their was balanced among both owned and rented accommodation of 50% in a year 1971. From the year 1981 to 2011 in owned accommodation ,their was continuous incline between 60% and 70% while their was decline between 35% to 40% in the rented accommodation

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion5.5
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a clear overview of the trends and selects key data points to illustrate the changes over time. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the period from 1981 to 2011 lacks precision, and the mention of 'no change' in 1953 is not fully supported by the visual data provided. While the main features are identified, the report would benefit from more detailed comparisons between the two categories at specific intervals to better highlight the shifting relationship between owned and rented accommodation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the overview to the specific details. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'Overall' are used to link sentences. However, there are some issues with mechanical cohesion and referencing. For example, the phrase 'It's followed by in 1939' is awkward, and the repetition of 'their was' (intended as 'there was') throughout the text makes the flow feel somewhat repetitive and mechanical rather than natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the reader to understand the trends described. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and misuse of terminology. For example, 'percentile' is used incorrectly to refer to 'percentage', and 'calibrated' is not the most appropriate term for describing data presentation. Additionally, the phrasing 'at their peak rate' and 'ratio of owned households was keeps on inclining' shows a lack of control over collocations and verb forms, which limits the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but it is marred by frequent grammatical errors. The most persistent issue is the confusion between 'their' and 'there', which occurs repeatedly. There are also errors in subject-verb agreement, such as 'ratio... was keeps on inclining' and 'there was balanced among both'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammatical structures, preventing a higher score.

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