Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of residentials living in their own homes and rented houses in years 1918 to 2011 in England and Wales.

Overall, the percentage of personal houses drastically increased with the time whereas, rented homes percentage got decreased in the years. While, year 1971 showed the most similar percentage for rented and own homes whereas, before and after this year drastic changes had happened.

In year, 1918 people own houses percentage was almost 25 which drastically changed with the time and in year 2011 it reached to 65 percent. On the other people interest in rented homes reduced dramatically from year 1918 to 2011 where percentage got declined from 75 to 35. Whereas in year 1939 or 1953 rented households percentage is almost similar with 65 percent which is matching the the count of own household in year 1991 and 2001. Slight change has been happened in year 2011 with rented houses percentage increased as compare to year 2001.Year 1961 and 1981 showing same percentage with bigger change in own house and rented houses.

In contrast, people are more interested to buy their own homes as compare to rented houses with the time changes. The gap between accommodation in rented houses and own households considerably, reflecting a shift in preferences.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You highlighted the key shift from rented to owned accommodation over the period. However, the response lacks precision in reporting specific data points. For example, stating that 1939 and 1953 had 'almost similar' percentages of 65% is confusing, as the chart shows distinct values. Additionally, some comparisons are slightly inaccurate or difficult to follow, such as the mention of 1961 and 1981. To reach a higher band, ensure that the data cited directly matches the visual information provided in the chart and avoid vague descriptions when specific figures are available.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'In contrast' and 'Whereas' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Some transitions feel mechanical, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when comparing multiple years. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a more seamless narrative throughout the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'drastically increased', 'declined', and 'shift in preferences'. However, there are several instances of unnatural word choices and minor errors, such as 'percentage of residentials' (should be 'residents' or 'households') and 'people own houses percentage' (should be 'the percentage of people who owned houses'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise academic collocations would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'rented homes percentage got decreased', 'in year 1918 people own houses percentage was', and 'Slight change has been happened'. These errors, particularly regarding verb tense and article usage, are noticeable. While they rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they indicate a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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